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on Dolly was a damn fine lamb by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Feb 2003, 8:38 PM
bleats. baa. baa. bah!
lowercase s in shelters, please.
two nits:
wine saturated the sponge;
you seem to be implying that judas dined on holy bread that evening.
sure.
Hurry! I wouldn't want to miss that. Will you wear your shower cap too?
Delightful.
Fail. Safe. Both.
Scourge.
As for the poem, I suggest you invert the structure, so:
Wooden seahorses drown.
Icarus laughs at fallen skylarks
As Aeolus sighs.
Yes, Besooted Fiend, but it Miraculous Healing Dogge Pooe, and with it, I Sight the Sightless, and Erect the Wheel-ed. (You won't be needing that Viagra anymore, Child.) Rise, Son! Cast aside thine round and tumbling Legge-Mockers! Stride! Gambol! Salsa, if you will! (I hear god'swife has a hell of a shimmy).
There. That was lovely.
I wonder if Lord Ganus has a recipe at the ready for Miraculous Dogge Pooe?
Yeah I guess it should be shouldn't it? That's what happens when I write after two days of no sleep. Creativity up, (or inhibition down if you prefer) grammer/organization down.
What does the "e" mean?
A suggestion:
try and ease the connections between the lines. Make the rhythm more natural, easy, as spoken word. This is base carbon, and pressure must be applied; too much, and striations ruin the effect; too little, marcasite. You, sir, are a smooth-tongued devil. I sense it is not beyond your ken to make the needed modifications. I anticipate the boldness of the results. Accept this seven, for now. I assure you there is an eleven in hiding. Your task will be to draw it out.
Black jelly on your tongue, indeed. Bravo.
I see you have a fixation with the FAT. Perhaps you might reconsider your menu, before the gout sets in?
I can take care of that foryou, sugarhips, and no one need know. Unless, of course, you'd like the whole experiment videotaped, and posted on line. I asuure you that you would find my anatomy most delightfully interesting. Call me.
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All I ask is that you view me as your one true goddess.
Actually I'm right now drinking schnapps.
FUCKING WINE DRINKING FAGGOTS
I know it's you, Dark Angel. It's obvious.