poemwanker
on The Poem To End All Poems by Zubster
16 Feb 2003, 12:25 AM
Have you ever considered that the purple and red fire might be iodine in your cooker? If so you deserve all the sandwiches you get.
This is bloody brilliant!
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
Yeah, the whole thing is a bit random. The big question is: do you get those lines?
Fear of Garbage? Damn fine name.
lol. yeah. word.
DROW! <smack> a shot rings out * bang, my pants drop to the floor... keanu reaves winks at me, and says, thanks for the champagne... dude" but i know not where i'm at, and i smell like the after shaved old spicy ness of a ..GAYE... politician. and i have a new tattoo that says luke skywalker is dead..i panic and bolt for the elevator, but as i reach it, it spontaneously implodes into a fgemine gas that then turns into my mother and i'm now holding a skull and dressed in shakespearian tightes... i have soft bulbous tears fallingg from my shifty eyes and peach lipstick on.. i am in love ...with the devil...and his name is................. peter pan peanut butter, peanutty.
hhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa! chirpe.
quick cure... warm beer, cold shower. saxophone. shoe be do be do
<brought to you by 'Valentines day' just another way to fuck with your poverty complex>
your bio sounds tempting, but i fear your creame too bitter and at such a fare age... what is this dire age of man (and woman sometimes) coming to? TELL ME SWEET LORD LEST I COLLAPSE UNDER THE SHEER WEIGHT OF IT ALL... well accompanied by the fact that i'm cross eyed and weigh in at about 283 lbs. Pardon me... my half of a chicken two large pizzas, and six pack of bud (light of course) just arrived... fucking pink dot... i'm a lucky guy, see ya.
i have never met a snake that stole anything except for maybe a mouse's life. Perhaps you should just get the fucke out of the garden and call it a day. And by the way give me back my rib bitche or start paying rent on it. Years of bad cooking and boring sexual positions, and you're still not happy with my total ruinment (new worde)? tsk. Women... the nerve.
When i read this i initially thought of the ufo crash in roswell nm. there was metal debris that acted like aluminun that could straighten itself back out after you crumpled it up... i enjoy that image some how, and the others you have presenred along with it. have an 8.
what an imagination you have
lovely.
what were you thinking when you posted this? wow it spins fast, you sure are deep.
blah blah blah bitch bitch bitch
yes. nicely woven. "mite" should be "might" in S1, otherwise, very pleasing.
grease up your feet, and get your facts straight, if you are going to anthropomorphize. male lions attack their cubs. etc.
you lost me with the first line. your rhymes are stetched.
your metaphors are exhausted.
it was ok...no strong feelings though
His momma yells.....refers to his childhood of when he was severly abused. It's taking the story of a schizophrenic from the now to his childhood....the progression of the disease.
Hi,
1 spelling error 'schizophrenic' I liked the beginning, and understand now why you liked Parting th Curtain, I didn't find the connection, or else you took a sharp turn, at His Momma....
nice though. I really liked the beginning.