-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Savior Self by OneFingerAnswer
2 Feb 2003, 8:05 PM
2. Jesus is the savior whether or not you accept the Teachings of Christianity. And he is the savior whether or not he fell.
3. What is "making your own chains" supposed to mean? Isn't that a metaphor? Or are you talking about some sort of chain-manufacturer?
4. No, I'm saying that it's perfectly possible for someone to be capable of saving others without being capable of saving themselves, even if the idea of saving oneself makes sense.
I do not know whether I am related to VP Dan, since I don't know who the fuck he is. I can't make sense of the previous two utterances since they don't contain a verb.
Narrow minds associated with homosexuality. There's a new one. Anyway I don't have a narrow mind when it comes to poetry but zero's "I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition'" was prose plain and simple.
How would I know? I don't have one.
1. Uh oh a typo. God save us all.
2. Jesus is the savior only if you accept the Teachings of Chrisianity. I'm pretty sure he fell once or twice.I mean he was always walking everywhere on dirt roads. I'm sure he causght his foot on a rock or something.
3. When people who are as thin as me get excited or upset they feel their heart beating both on their back and on their ribs. The 4th stanza wasn't even metaphor. It's about as straight foreward as it gets.
4. Are you saying that one can't save him or herself?
Poem. No e. Are you related to VP Dan?
Where would one find said questionnaire? I am hungry. And have an answer for everything. (So says my mum.)
Bring it on, Sirrah!
no, more just cramming in the syllables because I'm not a poet enough to have better words. Though I like 'tis.
Yeah, I know he has already had several guns to the head, and, no luck. That's what happens at the University of Life.
You shan't be having the bun. You may have the pie if you complete a questionnaire about Omnibuses.
>insert comment here<
DON'T MEAN TO BE YELLING....FAULTY KIOSK.
WELL KIDS, THIS IS CALLED ASSONANCE. IF I HAD REPEATED A HARD CONSONANT SOUND LIKE A "C" OR A "K" IT WOULD HAVE BEEN CALLED ALLITERATION. YOU CAN USE THESE TWO TECHNIQUES TO HELP SET THE TONE OF YOUR POEMS. HAVE FUN!
um too late.
he has already had several guns to the head, and, no luck.
but, i'll take the pie and the bun, since he's no longer eligible. okay?
gee, thanks a lot, pally!
(um, i know it doesn't make up for you and your lungs splitting and all, but, I THINK YOU"RE SWELL!!!!!!)
Get the fuck out of here. GET OUT OF MY FUCKING CAB.
Yes, of course it does, you cock. What the fuck do you think poemes are? They're either rhyming verse or pieces of prose with linebreaks that having confusing parts in so when people read it they don't understand it and think it must therefore be about something "higher" than humans that we weren't supposed to understand, i.e. "beauty".
YOU'VE BEEN TO THE UNIVERSITY OF LIFE AND THEY DIDN'T EVEN FUCKING TEACH YOU THAT? WHEN SOMEONE HOLDS A GUN TO YOUR HEAD YOU'LL LOSE YOUR PRETENTIONS PRETTY FUCKING FAST MISTER. PIE AND A PARIS BUN.
What the fuck is this? HUH? COOK PASS BABTRIDGE
1. "Savior" is spelled "savior", not "savoir". "Savoir" is the French verb to know.
2. Jesu is the Savior. He never fell.
3. The second, third and fourth verses are complete nonsense. They don't make any sense. They're just random bits of angst that rhyme. Your heart doesn't beat on your spine. That doesn't even make sense as a metaphor.
4. It's perfectly possible to be able to help others but not help oneself. Indeede, one might argue that the idea of helping oneself is buncombe. One does not help oneself to go to the gentleman's chamber. One merely goes. I think you have become confused because of phrases like "Help yourself to some fucking pie." A similar principle applies to being a savior without being a self-savior.
This is a truly bad poeme. The only good part is the hilarious pun in the title. By 'hilarious' I mean 'skdhfajlsdfhlkasjhf'.
Acquired immuno-deficiency syndromes.
The only light at the end of any tunnel is a train. Get out of the way. ther is some honest and worthwhile emotion here, you just need to learn how to paint. I think your vision is strong.
The last stanza makes me so tremendously happy. the first, not as much. This is worthy of a more universal title.
poetandknowit
replying on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
2 Feb 2003, 6:11 PM
It would look cute. But at least I would suck my own and not everyone elses. Do you swallow? Or is that extra?
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
2 Feb 2003, 6:08 PM
You know what would look cute? you sucking your own cock with two japanese chefs preparing miso soup with tofu on your back as a cable t.v show we would call it <He's a poet and he knows it? see him bend for his own pleasure, it would be a comedy tragedy with a hint of drama, but not much.>