Every time, I read it I think it's about me....and I guess that's what poetry is about....but since you claim it is not...instead of a 10...here's a 9.

I like this alot especially the chorus, but you knew that already. The song is quite nice. Hmmmmmm....someone gave you a one...shame really....here's a 9.

Do you have this recorded? I think this poem went crash, boom, bam as well. It's average...a bit cheezy too...5

DA in his Lazy Boy...nude and oiled....Hahaaaaaa....I can just imagine it an overweight Physics grad student from Cambridge...spitting out Physics theory as he rocks in the Lazy Boy back and forth. This should be the official Poemranker anthem...7

Put a bandana on the dog....hahhaaaaaa...poor dog is now officially knighted a St. Monica Prince....all the beautiful fags at the gym wear bandanas...back to your poem..... I like it because it's simple. In most of your other work you seem to layer way too much. Your poems are unraveled by people like z and perhaps da, but they are not accessible to the masses...and ultimately don't you want your poetry to speak to people? Yes...9

Okay, I read this twice, and I don't really get it...but then again when you use phrases such as Sprachenpuante of emorraggia....I have to now go and look it up...damn...this is turning out to be way too educational....when you were writing this did you see yourself as actually rhyming out loud? Yes, Eminem meets Al Sharp. Intresting, indeed...I shall read it again tomorrow. Maybe a few hours of sleep would give me more brain power.and then I'll vote..controparti?

so John is you, correct? Yes, poor bastard.

To prove i am here for the poetry. only. Des, in all honesty, you're much better at spending money then writing poetry, but i'm sure you knew that, and it's no water of your back. Even Muti's poetry is scorching better than this husk exoskeletoned denial. I could edit it for you. that is if you'd like.

I'm not getting the connection bn. the last line and the other two...Eyes bigger than mouth? It follows....5/7/5 and I love Tom and Jerry...6

at least you're truthful...but no Aspen or gym membership...more like $80....for being honest here is a 7. But if you need a gym membership I can perhaps give you one...perhaps.

Intresting piece indeed, a bit too long but intresting nevertheless. Wasn't it you that said we should only write from experience? So, are you saying that watching the Discover Channel is like actually going to Africa and observing the animals?

My favorite by far....we have the mom, the dad, and me? How did I earn the honor of being one of the people that turned you into Hamlet...and yes you're the common denominator. Here's an 8.

I especially enjoyed the ending.

very nice.

dendritic, doppelganger...going to my dictionary....must you use Webster on me? Other than that a fine capture of raw emotion...9

But the question is did you take advantage of the black leather couch? When you're paying $120/hr...might as well. Your poem right on...from personal experience.

Another masterpiece! The Ramada Hotel, an Indian owned establishment, full of bugs hard to identify....the one in downtown LA is out of this world....I've never seen so many baby roaches. Did you know that a roach can survive without its head for nine days? You would've had you read "Things that make you go hmmm" There's this sheme (transvestite) that I see all the time strutting her/his stuff on Santa Monica Blvd...she looks like she might be from Hong Kong...ahhhhh...I'm getting a mental picture of her saying fucky, fucky 10 dollar me love you long time.......sorry, I tend to go on tangents at times.

Whoever gave this a 3 is a cross bn. Newt Gingrich's hair cut and the Realians' spokesperson's big forehead.....

Haaaaaaahaaaaaaaa.... If you got published, I would actually buy the book. You're fucking amazing....you nailed it.