wOrnella Mutiw
on Only the lowest lows by Crakyamuni
19 Jan 2003, 3:34 PM
You've been reading too much of "The Art of Happiness" by his holiness the one only budamonk, Dalai Lama. For that and for being a weed wacker you get a 7. Why is there so much spacing bn. the last line? Looks and reads awkward.
7,7,5.....I thought Haikus were to be in the form of 5,7,5 (17 syllables). Rules...who cares....I like it...8. He has been hanging out with Pee Wee Herman a bit much.
I KNOW YOU SHOULD NEVER HAVE WRITTEN THIS. NEVER LITTLE THEN I KNEW BUT I KNOW NOW, THIS YOU SHOULDN'T DO.
playing with jimson? Or have you seen the roots she lays in man? Possesive is an understatement.
It's the little things that keep me up at night. (had to get up and write this down). The last n things I've written have only been 4 lines. strange, that. My attention span? 'ken' is one of those scrabble words that I'll never forget from childhood. :)
Exactly.
An exceptional read. Intriguing, like blue cheese and toe jam.
Wowzers! Mighty tasty jerky you cook there, partner! Here's a 10, 'cuz it's Christmas!!!
Well, I admit that my knowledge of quantum mechanics
is conceptual and not formal or involving mathematics.
I leave that to the physicists. And regarding the "quantum
world", I realize many writers and reviews on the subject
tend towards hyperbole and misinterpretation. I also become
weary of all the pseudo science and mystical posturing that
is so prevalent. I recall Stephen Hawking mentioned this in
one of his books, distancing himself from the crowd you have
previously mentioned. Personally, cosmology is the most
profound and interesting subject I have encountered over the
years and, like you, hate to see it cheapened by supposed
experts who senationalize the field with a lot of nonsense
in order to appeal to the many simple-minded and uninformed
readers who believe such claptrap. But, perhaps they gain
some insight into the quantum world and that is probably
better than being totally ignorant on the subject. Then again, who was that who said a little knowledge can be dangerous?
I thought you might like a little limerick I wrote recently:
There once was a theorist named Einstein,
the universe he sought to redefine.
He wrote of relativity
while hiding his proclivity
for reading his astrological sign.
You're obviously new to creative writing. That's OK! Poemeranker is wonderful environment in which to improve your skills! Just a quick heads-up FYI. Cheers! We'll touch base later this week.
1. One quote concerning the film 'Independence Day', 'One of the best movies ever! It rarely happens when I find a movie that is so great, however, Independence Day is a movie I love so much. I have seen way over 50 complete times (literally) and I can't wait to see it again. There is such a great combination of acting talent and plot, which makes this a great movie.'
2. I asked you to recommend me some books in order to find out which books you would recommend. If your experience with the subject is limited to such 'Isn't the quantum world really weird, it defies all logic, my God it's both a particle AND a wave, AND IT KNOWS WHETHER WE'RE WATCHING IT!' popular science potboilers, then no wonder you're arguing as you are.
3. I see you've given up on the Bertrand G. Wronglotion Challenge.
Forgot to ask...Just what brand of aquavitae are you referring to? I might try some if it isn't over 100 proof. Hell, I'll try some regardless. The stronger the better.
Bravo, sir!! A difficult form to master but you have done so in this gem. Personally, I don't even attempt to write vilanelles. Much too stuctured and very hard to write without sounding forced. A ten.
I liked this but it needs editing. Too much redundancy and needless fill words. One example:
"Night turning today, day to turning to night....The day dreams turning into nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Every day starting over and over....
Perhaps this would work better:
"Night turning to day; day to night....Day dreams becoming nightmares....The cycle of madness never ending....Each day like the one before...." If tightened a bit, the makings of an excellent poem.
Not bad. Short and sweet. Typo in last line. For ever should be forever.
Bendy. Cool. kenned? ok. kenned.
a moment, but doesn't "poem" for me.
this I like. "well past dinner time" seems a bit prosaic for the rest in phrasing, but... I like.
and I've never really been comfortable with haikus giving information in the title that is not distinctly said (as opposed to hinted at) in the poem.
depends, really. some people say one thing, and others another. as such, yes and no, no and yes, and whatever. :)
some say that anything written in english can't be haiku. all the rest of the arguments stem from that, to some extent or another.