<{Baba^Yaga}>
on I remenber by little_angel_maria
3 Jan 2003, 11:55 PM
ha ha EWhojoyhhyggifv. the an epilepsy attack holy shit, to fucking funny, i'll remenber this...10! this is the best worst written poem of all... YOU GET THE BIRD LEGGED HUT OF CONSTANT EMOTIONAL EMOTION WITH NO MOTION" AWARD IN AHHHH not swallowing your tongue? sure why not. 10!
lol, dude this poem is awesome. Funny as hell i have to say. Although having to deal with your cursed arse, i still think it is pretty cool.
`splosions are good. old detective series are lots of things. 10.
yes it is. my suggestion is to do both of them. separately or at once, your choice.
you start me off expecting more about plaid skirts, then you talk about other stuff. Boo! Boo-urns!
Yeah, the 'in to' portion was supposed to be together, my mistake. 'lost as my tears in her rain' is a good suggestion, I like the idea behind it. The feeling I was trying to evoke was a 'sad distance' if that makes sense. This may not accurately translate if I were to change it. I would definitely have to restructure the previous line if I were to make it work. I may have to think about that a little, good idea nonetheless. Thanks.
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been there, know it, feel it...it works quite well. like your style. To the point and honest. Passionate yet simple. Very good.
smooth. a picture painted for those who watch the waters yet relate to the vivid characterization and imagery
Abort, retry, fail? "Therefore I shall distrusted" doesn't make sense. Typo in last line. But that's minor stuff--overall, this just doesn't do enough or show enough. What's the story, the moment, the message?
huh?
You can definitely feel what you wrote. It's quite comprehensible to a general audience. Easy for people to relate yet very passionate. keep up the good work
Thanks. I thought I'd try to take my work in a new direction with this username - it seems to have worked out well!!
I like the concept of a hot maid. But this is just dumb.
The rhyme of Chaucer and force her made me laugh, which is saying a lot. Good work. But I still have to nullify you (get it?) Zero.e
Not only are you still here, but you still suck shit at everything because you're a complete fucking retard (seriously). Zero.??
I'm Ranger and I'm into poetry and art!!!!! ZERO. STANDING ON YOUR NECK PISSING INTO YOUR NOSTRILS.a
You won't learn anything useful from drawing statues. Zero because you didn't know that.n
I'm giving you a zero because you're avering 3 dicks before lunchtime you're causing some tension in the gay mafia.??
The format of this one is overused. 0.