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on God and Country by dougsoderstrom
3 Jan 2003, 5:45 PM
Write some more poetry about it, pathetic whining apathy ridden faggot fuck face dicklicker. Yeah or a haiku, even better. Grow up. You get a 10, unless you bother to vote.a
Ambitious, even for u! I realize you're mine.n
What's with girls and poetry. Jesus christ I never saw Ezra Pound cover this material.p
why not...write a poem about it?
Is your mom as handsome as me? I think not.I
Seawall? Dyke? 4??////// YOU CHEATED ON ME IN DEED AND IN THOUGHT WITH ANOTHER WOMAN/
good work, you get a/.d d a a 8 no 9 no 10 no 9. NO u8! 9! OKAY 9!a
You still feel 1onely don't you. Get it?? 1. Just kidding, 0.
Plaid Skirts are so fucking tired. Zero.d
Dark Angel's new persona is amazing, good work.r
nice to see something that isn't haiku. Care for a boku?
This is aweful - not awesome.r
dogs -> dongs, and give it more of a punch at the end. Trust me I'm an expert.??
NO
Which ways would that be?? By the way it's obviously your fault.
Umm. Aren't you missing Pop Idol?
Its a good job you have such good basis for your insanely low votes. Even if you hate this poem it deserves more than you gave it. Open your eyes to the rest of poem ranker, there are far worse poems written by a few unthoughtful people just for a laugh. THEY deserve 0s and 1s. Ranger has speant time and effort on this poem, you should give him credit just for that.
I agree.
so, if i try to help him, as he has asked, i'm ruining his life?
my hole is quite comfortably furnished, thank you, and i have no intentions of dying in it just yet.
ranger? would you like me to comment on your revision?
mikius, you have a lot of balls speaking for someone else. i'm glad you like it the way it is NOW. did you see it before? how do you know which comments apply to which versions?
I like the repetition, but I can see it might be a bit much. I think there's a lot that needs changing.....it's something I wrote years ago that came into my head today, and this is all I remember.