-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on Ode to -=Dick_Angle=- by Bobjim the II
31 Dec 2002, 11:03 AM
-=Unperceptive_and_forumlaic=-
I think what you've done there is confused "poetry" with "prose". It's an easy mistake to make. 10!!!
Are you being sarcastic?
Ha ha ha!
Why is poetandknowit Poemranker's godfather? I would hate to have a godfather who baselessly criticises all my family. But I suppose that's just me.
He has a poetandknowit
thats a very interesting idea...crazy...but i like it...9
i love the images, and those last two lines end it perfectly...8
Freedoms of simplicity" is close. I'll work on another title,maybe. What else can you tell me from this ? Thank you Mrs G.
Could you stop wasting my time with implications of beastiality? First kiddie porn now this....god i hope you don't have any animals near you...poor things.
Your name really scares me Bob Jim...serial killer meets a mullet sporting trucker and you get Bob Jim....so you like Slim Jims?....you had to stretch out the ass with something tiny first, that's why I asked.
Describe the forest, describe the light....is the forrest dense? is the light bright?...etc.
Quite frankly I am sick and tired of discussing him. I have better things to worry about. It's unfortunate we had to end it in a negative way, but oh well sometimes you can only wish for the best. Like I said I wish him and his family the best of luck. I did not know that Nadine was pregnant when we started seeing each other. I find it strange that you know about his affairs, but then again it's none of my business. As far as poetry goes, I come here to read other people's poetry and to get inspired. Of course my endgoal is to get better...
How does light fall less on deaf ears than on the ears of the hearing? You seem like a passionate person, always necessary for a poet, but your poem is too much about what you feel, and too little about what happened. Life is a confusing and difficult thing, except of course those secret moments. What has your sub-conscience created? By the way, I think it's a bad idea to place a line break after 'sub'. How about just 'This light that brakes through the bitter black, is my only compass'?
I think the title is mis-leading, this has nothing to do with the relationship between the man and the fish. Find another title. Is this about being a provider, or is this about the freedoms of simplicity?
I never stopped loving you. I pretty much love everyone, when I despise someone I ignore them. I never despised you, you never gave me reason to. Although your constant bickering with Horus8 made me sick of the both of you.
Nothing good with Jeremi lasts forever. It comes and gos, he loves Nadine regardless of what he may have told you. Everybody loves Nadine, she is completely lovely. She's not educated but she's smart in many ways. She's a wonderful person and quite frankly an idiot for putting up with some of Jeremi's shit. I couldn't do it, and neither could you, don't fool yourself, you'd have to be somewhat submissive to be able to deal with living with Jeremi. He's moody. He might love you today and then hate you tomorrow, He will talk to you intimately one night and then not speak to you for days. Quite frankly you are making yourself look childish. I believe he's being an ass to you because you're pulling a Jerry Springer on him. You're probably making him hate you. Tell me, what is your purpose in participating on this site? Are you trying to improve your poetry skills? As they say in acting "What do you want in this scene"? Is your love going to save him from himself? "Caught in a weird situation" of his own making. Jeremi is incapable of the kind of love you expect from him.
There's a story in a story here. Tell me what you see, please.
Thanks
Fuck this....this is not what I am about. I appologize for the mud slinging. That's it...NO MORE. You've said your peace, and I've said mine. Actually, I really do wish you the best of luck. Happy New Year!