some deleted user
on House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas
24 Dec 2002, 6:34 PM
it is often hard to judge works with a religious base, simply due to the fact that i know not your own faith, or lack of... however, as a work, this is very intriguing... i do not often enjoy poems that rip off songs, but this one catches my eye... it is your own, but i still prefer the original...
so who is she???
shawn, this was the chick who stayed in the guest house for a bit, remember. right before you came back out here from new england..remember the bruno story? ahhhh.see. told you.
a good laugh, yet possible that a real "poem" lies within... continued work is highly recommended...
you can't find it because it's not stolen. it's aimed right at my forehead like a brick. see.
i do truly hope this was intended in jest... it is a negative contrast to your other postings... your sobriety during composition is questioned...
again, another that seems to be a wonderful work in the making... you show amazing promise, yet some refining is in order...
interesting... let me know when you're completely done... it reads as though there is still some work to be done... wonderful beginning phase though...
whoops sorry, maybe not. i'll fix that zero later for you.
"fear on your forehead
terror between your teeth" damn fine statement here lol. wow. you took me there p&k you really dud. did i mean.
dark helmit? will you tighten my helmet? just..you..know..let me know if i'm wearing it right?
hahaha thats really cute, and the rhyme scheme is done quite nicely
that was lovely. merry x~mas.
We here can only pray and hope.
yuel tide cheer!!
yeah. bummer. would you like to hear one of his last radio shows? i can email the address to radio stations archive to you..it was a cool show..you'd like it. merry jihad z.sweetie b good and careful..watch out for slot machines and gin tables. <3h.o
can't find this one. not yet, anyway. tick tick tick
and joe strummer's dead, so there's no more rockin' the casbah.
fuckit. merry jihad, h.
xo, z
i like the orignal better too.
merry christmas to yoooo!
Yours rocks as well, sir.