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replying on Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss
20 Nov 2002, 9:02 AM
you can even hear him read it on this site.
see that nicholas jones?
get a welshie to read it for you! and post it!
although, reading it again, i see that there's more than i thought the first time. now i feel like it's a poem that is awash in patricia highsmith imagery, and it's starting to sink in.
yes. that part qualifies. but the essence of the vilanelle is the repeated lines over the event of the peom. see 'do not go gentle into that good night':
http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?prm
readint too deeply into is is going to bore me. can you enlighten me?
I don't like this poem but I think it qualifies. Five tercets, a final ququatrain and two rhymes.
i hate to dissent, but if i have to read one more goddamn poem about the sea, i might have to kill a kitten on my way home from rehab tonight.
this reminds me of the answer to the question no one asked.
as usual, struck dead by the snapping tail of god.
Your title has a typo. the mood never builds.
back to the midlands, that you love so well?
Take out the Shakespeare. the second stanza is far better than the first though it still needs work. What the hell's a clich?
i give this one two swastikas up! lovely work. 9
==Doylum
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:43 AM
Yep
cause i've done a lot of growing up. cause otherwise their pants would smell. see a love of the midlands
yer like whatever
borrow the cucmber and make a large tato bread and cucmber sannndwiches.
got to go again
who knows for how long?
Too many words, too little content.
now you're speedy d?
why can't you just go back to being d, like i loved before? why does everything always have to change? what happened to your wings?
you should worry. you abandon me like that, and leave me all alone to defend myself against a girl whose claim to fame is that she likes cucmbers and her prof thinks she's good. thanks.
what's a girl to do?
i gave back his chainsaw, so i am now defenseless.
==Doylum
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:26 AM
worrying zzzzzz worrying
the action of not thinking and saying. that he did not think when the words came out; that he did not thik what they would mean, what they did mean. also, it's like a physical blow, set apart like that--because i expected him to think, to care, to not be such a tool.
god'swife
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:25 AM
it's so hard to stay out ofthe sheets. That would be the least of her follies. I'm more hammers than claws.
i have a lot of theories about kiki. most of them knee-jerks, due to her suave bedside manner. but i have tried to keep my claws in. so far. she obviously thinks she's superior. too bad she doesn't understand that we are here to help each other get better. if she wants to be miss starshine, she can trot her ass off someplace else where only perfect poets post. or at least those endorsed by 'quite good' published poets and profs.
i wonder if he thinks she is as talented 'twixt the linen as on it. only the finest.