god'swife
on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness
20 Nov 2002, 8:22 AM
"that you did not think" what? I can guess but I want you to tell me in one or two words. I think that's just a personal thing. Very nice, like a piece of driftwood.
god'swife
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:14 AM
Agreed, but it's easier on me to be attacked than to watch someone I like be attacked. Plus I have the feeling kiki might do alright if she'd just pull back on the throttle a bit.
they're part of it. they beat you down. there are comforts to be shared with others that will lift you up. dwell on whichever suits you. i have made my choice.
scraps--you don't like the convoluted metaphor of food/wood leftovers being 'fed' (consumed) by that which prepares the food? the whole business of the residual of how he earns the food and nothing wasted from the job either? no? that's why i used scraps. i wanted nothing wasted. i wanted the wood to be food as well.
spent--echoes 'exausted' in meaning. good vowel repeat. i'm a sucker for sonorous soundings, p&k. yes?
god'swife
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:02 AM
What I seem at what I am are to very different things. You seem like a total bitch, but I'm sure your not. Let me say it more clearly. You came here and start spewing rhetoric and insults as if you know what your talking about. I don't like you. This is by far the best poem you have posted, don't pay attention to the votes because they don't reflect anything and don't really matter anyway. The sarcastic point I was trying to make about the human experience thing: You trash sentiment, and then your best poem is all about sentiment
i wish i could hear it though. pretty please?
if only there were a 'near-vilanelle' option. i am disappointed you call it one and do not deliver. i'll come back and reread when less jaded.
unpleasantly bumpy rhythm and pretty incoherent too. ick.
"it's good ,really, you just can't read it right!" Please. If you don't want to be critiqued, go to a different website.I hear "grouphugsforpoets.com" is good. Many of your faults have been pointed out. Also, thoughI can't speak for all present, I can honestly say I don't care for you.
actually, p&k, I haven't given shin all 10s. outside of this artificial environment, i also help edit his other work. Don't assume things, it makes you look foolish.
thanks for the pity. learn what sarcasm is. it'll take you far in life.
Happiness is a cigar called Jesus Christ.
is this finished? its not a poem and as a piece of literature its woefully uninspiring.
Keep on writing though, you can do it
is this finished? its not a poem and as a piece of literature its woefully uninspiring.
Keep on writing though, you can do it