god'swife
on Dad by Someone
19 Nov 2002, 11:38 AM
Get rid of the rhetorical questions. They add nothing except making you sound pitiful, which is very uninteresting. Your problem is interesting, so I'll take this scrap heap and write a poem about it for you later this afternoon.
priceless. even (dare i say it?)gorptacular. I'm all smiley and stuff. remins me of a Kliban cartoon.
i like gaelic better.
are you trying to hint at something, shin?
i was in a bad mood when i wrote those comments. sorry for any offense. the bottom line, as i was trying to assert somehow, is that to convey anything (art, as you call it) you should at least pretend to want to, as a starter. unless the readers speak welsh, or are as culturally enlightened as Settle, your message won't come across. it is interesting, but
if these are your reasons, then please link to a soundfile of someone speaking it. then the english speakers here can appreciate it for it's sounds. maybe horus will record you and post it at gangbox, like he did with mrs.g. throws a whole new light on things, it does.
spoken like a true jackoff. and this: THE PROPER MEANING OF A WORD IS INSIGNIFICANT TO ME MOST OF THE TIME, might be the most pretentious thing i've ever heard. love, a complete fuckwit.
Filled with vitriol, and talk about a memorable last line.
Can we expect a sequel?
nice job
I THINK ALL WELSH POETS COULD LEARN A VALUABLE LESSON FROM DYLAN THOMAS. I.E. INGLES POR FAVOR!! IN ALL SERIOUSNESS THOUGH I ENJOYED THIS POEM A GREAT DEAL. YOU DON'T DISCOVER MEANING WITH A DICTIONARY - A WORD IS MEANINGLESS IF ONLY DEFINED BY OTHER WORDS...SORT OF A GODEL INCOMPLETENESS TYPE DEAL...SO THEREFORE WHAT ONE IS LEFT WITH AS FAR AS MEANING IS CONCERNED IS ONE'S REACTIONS TO THE WORDS, AND A POEM LIKE THIS FORCES US TO LISTEN TO AND FEEL WHAT WE WOULD OTHERWISE PASS OVER IN SILENCE. FRANKLY THE PROPER MEANING OF A WORD IS INSIGNIFICANT TO ME MOST OF THE TIME - WHAT IS MORE IMMEDIATELY AFFECTING IS THE CONTEXT WITHIN WHICH THE WORD IS NORMALLY USED, THE SOUND THAT IT MAKES...THE VIBRANT AND VARIED SHADES OF MEANING WHICH DISTINGUISH YOUR WORD CHOICE FROM THE OTHER 100 WORDS YOU COULD HAVE USED IN IT'S PLACE IF YOU HAD GONE BY THE BOOK. IN THIS SENSE, POETRY, OR PROSE WITH DELICATE ECONOMY, IS A PROCESS IN WHICH WORDS ARE CHOSEN AND BY THIS ACT ALONE EXALTED. THIS PROCESS IS MADE ARTFULLY CLEAR IN THIS POEM, AT LEAST TO PEOPLE WHO DON'T KNOW WELSH, FAR MORE THAN IN MANY OTHER POEMS OF LENGTH OR QUALITY. IN THIS POEM YOU HAVE MADE THE POETIC PROCESS APPARENT, AND IN CHOOSING TO DO SO HAVE EXALTED THE POETIC PROCESS IN A TRULY ELEGANT AND UNIQUE MANNER - THE WORK IS SELF JUSTIFIED - BEAUTIFULLY SIMPLE AND SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL. SO IF YOU DIDN'T LIKE IT YOU'RE A COMPLETE FUCKWIT.
Yes, 'cancel time' is very good - I quite like the 'art you make in bed' too.
This is sad...i love the first two lines
God, that was illiterate. I meant the end of s1 and the end of s2, but my fingers got confused.
I'm glad I could help! I hink it works much better now
The last three lines carry a great burden very gracefully. I wonder a bit at the variation in rhyme scheme between end end of s 1 and the of s2, but that's just the pernickety formalist in me trying to get out. The main thing is you got a sensitive comment from Bachus - that is all the praise you will ever need. Well done.
I agree with you. Thanks for the input. I have dropped those last two lines and I like it lots better.
pretty good CLG, but check paragraphs 2/4 for errors as it kills the vibe your trying to emanate
Nicely Constructed, philosophical, liked the line 'too content in the moment'
I am proud to say i never have had and never will have a mullet. I survived the eighties without a mullet - there is some form of heroism in that. Indeed, NZ - on Saturday in fact, for three weeks. We're travelling the whole length of the North island and then flying down to Christchurch and Queenstown on the South Island - it all looks fabulous. I'll let you know when i get back.
i agree with chrisof
Do you have a mullet? Z mentioned to me you and the wife were headed to New Z. Have fun. I am off there in a couple of months. Are you driving both islands or sticking to a few places?