Christof
on Litany of the Mullet by Shin-Bojangles
19 Nov 2002, 8:06 AM
I don't know if it's really lives up to the sacred heights of the haiku, but it is an insight into the mullet-wearer's psyche and invaluable for that reason.
poetandknowit
replying on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
19 Nov 2002, 8:04 AM
You can be my bodyguard. I love picnics. What will you bring?
The bit about the dirty joke is good, but I don't think you need the last two lines. It would be better left to just tail off, like your relationship.
poetandknowit
replying on Prose poem written in 1 minute and 27 seconds while listening to Slim Cessna croon by poetandknowit
19 Nov 2002, 8:03 AM
Now, wouldn't you meeting me in Mexico constitute as betrayal on both parts? How would we write that one off? Oh, yes, you could be my translator!! I use them all the time--no one would ever suspect. Did you see how politicians handle things in your country?
I hope we can look forward to some poems about the killing of geese and the badger parade.
Did you conjure this while skateboarding?
If you're going to flood the site with this crap, then please do not call it haiku. Maybe free verse, or how about "a random thought I woke up with this morning."
Nentman, add that one to the list.
Yeah--it makes of them something untouchable (<i>those words</i>)--but I'm all for assigning responsibility. ;)
Nicholas Jones
replying on I'm a homicidal kind of guy (spoof of every 'down-home' song you've ever heard) by Yardbird
19 Nov 2002, 7:07 AM
I personally like his song about nuclear proliferation called 'Who's Next?'. Or the mighty 'Masochism Tango'
i'm going to side with mrs.g on this. using "those" and referring to the words pushes the speaker waaay back--very stunned. makes a 'thing' of the words themselves, giving them the power they have had to sting. see it?
Wow. And ouch. This is terrific. I love its spareness and immediacy; also, the internal rhyming and the double meaning of "mean." Agree with you re: doubling "it's nothing"--a person, reacting, would surely have said it twice, dazed.
Was this originally "the weight of your words"? I think I'd prefer the "your"--"those" seems too removed.
Have a 10 for your pains.
It was a Harry Hill reference - greatest comedian in the world. You've got to have a system.
Translated, it would roughly mean:
I have to go out.
I don't like, he doesn't understand.
I have no problem.
But it really does lose something in translation. Actually, it was just some phrases I remember from my Welsh classes. But they sound nice together.
I think you'll find it's Welsh. And why the hell shouldn't I write in the Welsh language? Is there any rule on poemranker that says we must use English? I'm asserting my cultural heritage. Welsh was my grandfather's first language. And no, I didn't need a dictionary. I'll admit it doesn't make much sense, even if you speak Welsh, but what the hell, it's art.
yes...at last...
oh, settle! you're such a wiggly little snake!
translation please?
what the fuck is this shit? is someone taking a class in gaelic (is that what this is?) and writing poems from the dictionary? is poetry supposed to convey something to the reader? know why i'm asking?
Bravo, tovarisch! Another well-aimed blow at the soft underbelly of the education system!
Fantastic - 10! Cleverdevice strikes again!!! :)