greym0on
replying on Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on
1 Nov 2002, 6:52 PM
I can't do short poems well. Maybe it's because I don't say much in reality I have to continually blab when I write.
Don't know that one - how about this though?
Dear ones!
You play love on a violin.
The crude play love on a drum.
But unlike me, you can???t turn yourselves inside out
and entirely lips become.
This is my favorite poem of all time.
Ever heard of breaking your own heart? It's kind of funny actually... This poem has given me the most wonderful comments in such a short span of time. Makes me think I should don my black, listen to the Cure, smoke my menthol cigarettes and become stereotypical **sighhhhh** sadness all over again.
Thanks. Actually, I got the idea to write this from a bit of criticizm I got on a prior poem. golden que-tip?
how did you get to be such a great poet?
this is really good. I hate wells though.
for tortured english, 4 pts, for sheer effort, 2 pts, for making me laugh hard at the state of mind you must have had to get yourself into to write it, 4 more pts for a total of 10
That was a typo, it's "I'm". :)
Hi welcome to the madhatter's cafe. I the incarnate, nice to meet you. Nice philosophy on life cherie. Would your name be Brandon Walker perchance? if so leave a little banter for me.
Jones the P, you have neglected your duty as regards coffee houses, why is an poem about Star bucks, Costa coffee and other such drinking establishments not forecoming
This really is a poem of the night, all the dark longings and questionings that we don't want to face in the daylight. The last stanza and the final line are very moving indeed. I love this.
everyone has their own tropical spring these days, now don't they? how would we get on without them?
They will suck - for a Lenin badge, a look at your little red thing, and a party donation.
I was thinking more Stan Boardman
How dare you mock Frank Skinner the funniest funnyman that ever there was, or is it Bernard Manning?
Comedy geni' both.
My dear 'swife i am not the god lord. Yes thank you i am very well, although a little unbalanced. The deforminty was self inflicted. I chewed it off in an attempt to escape a 10 pint bushpig.
What parts don't i have?
What explaining?
I do love myself for who i am, 10 to 15 times a day.
If i made the young whippersnapper cry he only has himself to blame, after all he did look at me with those seductive eyes, and he never used the safe word once.
The single worst point in my life was when I found out my house had ants, by pouring ant-infested cereal into a bowl. didn't eat cereal for a very long time after.
The other day, I grabbed the last of the veggie pizza by ninja-ing past some chick. I thought she was going to slay me.