See my previous comment, break or burst towards heaven? I want you to take me hunting. I promise I'll be very good.

Thanx for the info

ah, brazen, there is nothing beautiful about it. don't lose yourself in a woman, find something there. and share. and never, ever fuck someone you love's sister. or even think about it. (assuming you are a male, or so oriented.)

many times, when a piece of mine is unfinished, the title is uncapitalized. so, if you read one of mine and find it so, you will know it for what it is: swaddling.

the question was added in the second writing. yes, it is a work in progress, and will no doubt undergo radical revision. i will take the question out, though. after my long drive home, i read it aloud and i do not like it, so, dahling p&k, out it goes. i am going to hear the blues tonight, and when i return, no doubt i will have more and more insight. cafe 9. i have told you of it before. it is a crossroads.

why does greener than leaves lose you? it is in the fall, and the leaves are no longer green. can that not be surmised, or does the timeline confuse? i thought that was clear. hmm.yes, mrs.g, he is in a blind. the ducks shoots free of their cradle--the river, where they are rocked gently, and they shoot heavenward with the sound of the shot. the slivers of blue are inside their wings--you've seen that? how would you suggest making it clearer without destroying the sparseness of it?

i used 'tug and coil' because he quoted it to me, from 'quickie'. and as for being easy, hypothetically, yes, i am as easy as i want to be. practically, no. i call the shots, and this did not happen. nor will it, because there is no music in him, and a great urge to tug. so, no hope.

Sonata-allegro is the basic form of the first movement of a Classical symphony, that's all. It basically goes: Introduction (if you want), Theme A, transition to Theme B, Theme B, then the Development, in which you play around with these two themes, and then the recapitulation, in which Theme A is played again, generally in a different key. You can then add a Coda if you want. Poems written like that are fun and far too rare.

Thank-you. However, I don't know if you want to be in this symphony.

No special form attempted. Not that I even know what sonata-allegro even is. I just write. I'd like to be familiar with this term though.

He is in a blind.

Uncradled does not bring to my mind unsafe. Are the slivers of blue ducks or bullets? I think ducks. Change shoot to break or burst. what do you think?

I hope so. shit I spelled couch wrong.oops