knickytoy
on Hunt by cobalt
18 Oct 2002, 1:13 PM
What's with the hunting? You and Rexx should compare notes. Ducks vs. Deer: Discuss.
The Bachian tribunal choice of the day. odelay!!!!!!!! 10! why, because of the squashed pomegranates and our stained fingers.
refreshingly inaccsessable. congradulations. way to get the reader to be empathetic towards anyone, just a one, in this ode. anyone. maybe james, maybe her, but nay...why, cuz i'm left wondering. why should i give a shit. i pray she keeps both of her shoes?, cuz i truly i'm that interested in the whole lot of you. really. it'll make that big of a difference when i wake up tomorrow. honestly.e
Thanks for the suggestion Christof... I hope that I described it a little better :o)
they could love it and say 'i'll never be her' as well
it's more in the lines of the finality of the poem/song
is such a defeat. you want her to wake up. it's about
denial and accepting it. if somone hates the conclusion
of the song so much they say I will never be that person
then the ends justify the means.
Service with a smile (and gritted teeth!) Great imagery but the tone makes it.??
As a matter of fiction, I am.
Your previous 2 were so good, my expectations are not met with this one, but I can see it in there, like a red speck in an egg. The last stanza is my favorite. Trying starting with that one and see were it leads, Sugar Dumpling.
jessicazee
replying on When Your Best Friend Says You Drink Too Much by jessicazee
18 Oct 2002, 10:07 AM
Incoherent yes. I had a few too many whiskeys lastnight methinks to start tapping away at the keys. I need to iron this out a bit, I agree.