Tintagiles
replying on On a chill morning by razorgrin
16 Oct 2002, 6:05 PM
It's inexistent, if she's driving her bike, scooter, broom out of the door. She appears to be levelling her eyes on his and suddenly zooming off, with no transistion. Maybe it'S just that Limonade and I know the house in question, and that driving out the door on bike, scooter, broom, whatever would be a tad difficult. It just doesn't quite seem to fit. We're picky.
I have capture the Spawn of Bachus. I am taking him to the Castle of Carl the Republican. I will feed him Famous Stars til he poops his Batmans. Caio for now.
There are these two girls and I love them more than anything
They have everything I want
And nothing but them is anymore important to me
But there of course are some problems
Ones that are not easy to fix
I try my best to solve them
But of course I can't get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch
Who, used to be my friend
Until she got pissed
Made one mistake
And she put me on "THE LIST"
So now Angie isn't my friend
All because I went wrong
Terryn made my life miserable
Wished at first I didnt belong
But then I look at the good side
Happy the other girl I love is still my friend
And try to make sure
This friendship won't end.
(I took the liberty of correcting your spelling)
Epic! Spectacular! Technicolor madness. Don't let Schpeilberg get his hands on it. He'll turn it into heart-warmer, the dirty little heeb!
I have read all your previous comments. You are the great offender, I mean defender, I mean trans-gender. E-mail sender. Drunken bender. Bike tire mender. Just kiddin' with ya hunny-buns. You are a tad anal when it comes to h'ay cooze. Domo aregato. Unstick the toddler.
SWEET...Very Impressed 10 for you...lmao 10 for using atleast 1% of ur brain
Yup, works best when you do it that way.
I take great offense to this. I am the great defender of the haiku. Had you read any of my previous defenses you would know that and not make a comment such as this.
7,000 dollars! 7,000 dollars! ( Hot Tamales are aero-dynamic) I'm glad I went to bed early that night.
Gaping hole? Please point it out least i fall in. Looks fine to me. She could be driving anything; bike, scooter, a broom. What's the problem?
I think I've got to agree with Tintagiles, bunny. It's like a gaping hole in the continuity of the piece. There's no transition and the reader finds herself wondering, "Does your sidewalk drive?"
No worries Miggy, it didn't happen, it's just a joke me and my friend Jeff have. I didn't expect it to do as well as it as, but I am glad it did, and I got some interesting reponses from it!! But sorry no I'm not some chick that goes out cybering, I myself find it childish, and...ewww'ish!! =) hehe.
then sitting hard pon the teeter totter. the fat kid launches the autistic boy with the prostetic leg and head gear over the chain link fence and into oncoming traffic. the blow of a horn. tire screech. the crunch of wood and plastic. the stink of sliding rubber. jesus christ! i have never seen a retards helmet roll that far. until now.
Frass, I'd write more of the event, but that's all there was to it. Unless he's back tomorrow, or something.