I presume devina's just trolling. best to ignore? I *hope* (she?)'s not serious.

Nobody hates you, least of all me. It's very intense around here. But if you stick it out you'll learn a lot in a short space of time. You are already ahead of the game because you're opening up to dialogue.

I asked what is wrong in THIS poem! Where does it show ANYWHERE in this poem that I would cage her up. All this poem talks about is how I would work hard for her. Please illustrate to me in this poem where it says I would cage her up

you have made her an object. she is a living, breathing person, as are you. she is not to be worshipped as an idol. she is to be respected as a friend, if she choses to befriend you. you are equals. in your poem, you would cage her, and save her sweet song for your ears alone. you are a prison guard, not a soldier. that is what you will do wrong. not to mention the narrow range of thought expressed int these words. stretch. compare. condense. don't be so obvious. why would anyone want to be with a sap? give her words of mystery. give her breadth and depth. you have made her a servant without her freedom.

Absolutely relevant. They colonized your indegenous peoples, stripped them of their culture and forced them to adopt their twisted patriarchal oppressive system. Just like they did here in the Americas. That's my point. Like it or not your belief system and gender philosophies are heavily tainted with their bullshit. Women don't need your protection. They need your unconditional love and friendship.

I know, I know, I have just been under a lot of pressure from my other poem. I don't know why everyone hates me so much for it. The force of the poem has nothing to do with hate, it is all love, but it brought up so much damn tension. Do you think my poems are too soft. I'm not used to this mushy stuff.

apology accepted. i see by your profile that you are young, and a boxer. may i suggest, in the future, that you sharpen your powers of observation before you leap into fights? do not build walls; tear them down. is it not generally taught in the martial arts that a wise man is always aware of his surroundings, and avoids conflict when possible? i was taught this. i am very capable of defnding myself. i have never started a fight. i have never lost a fight. i have had few, because i believe honor and respect are due all, until proven different. enough of my philosophy for tonight. get out of the gang, and improve your life. you are looking within by writing and posting here.

I think that's exactly what they do. Much like your website. I'm assuming you're passion is lending a hand so people can appreciate this brief existence a little bit more. Looking forward to seeing your more serious poetry.

Oh, and hispanics are alot more controlling than Filipinos in history. They came over and invaded our country and colonized us, and forced us into catholicism. Just a tidbit, not too relevant

Okay, I appreciate that comment, it was true. But you must understand that all cultures have gender roles, it's obvious anthropology. I just want to get it straight that, in this poem I was just trying to get to the point that I am worried about Joanna because of all external forces. I do trust her, but everyone has that worry inside you know? It's sort of like saying I love this person and I know she is the perfect partner, but what were to happen if she was snatched away? what would I do? I dont want to control her lifestyle or nothing, I just want her to know that she is my exclusive interest, and I hope she reciprocates.

Oh ok, I am sorry I see, that was very clever.

actually, the first line of your poem asks what to do. this was a respononse. to that query. take your loved ones and vacate the area, quit the lifestyle, just go away--or risk your and their untimely death. (that's the more civil version of what i originally said, but i was responding in kind to the situation you describe in your poem.) do you always snap like that when someone answers a question you have asked?

think about it for a minute. What are the gender roles in your culture? My culture is Hispanic which is very similar to yours. Of course I'm generalizing but let's just say that more often then not women are constrained by our cultures to certain gender specific roles. the standards and expectations set up for men and women are very different. Everything from virginity to hierarchy. Your poem mirrors that. I sure your intentions are good, but you have to open yourself up to being the kind of partner who will help a person find themselves not play house

Dear God's Wife, What an interesting name, I realise that much of my poetry is not what you would call grand, it is not meant to be, it is meant to be easily understood, it is meant to communicate with many people, not just the few who can get inside my head or who share my knowledge base. I do right more seriois peotry and maybe I will post some here. Thanks for reading and for the kind words.

what'll u do punk

Okay, and since when are Filipinos known for breeding abusive/controlling husbands? You're generalizing a whole culture.

Can I ask everyone something? WHAT DID I DO WRONG IN THIS POEM to make you all shoot at me? Is there something demeaning or cruel that I have wrote in this? I'm saying in this that I will work hard for this girl, and somehow that ties in with being an asshole? please someone explain

I asumed you were Filipino. Clits and fucking are best when mature.