Blue Magpie
replying on Friendship by Blue Magpie
9 Oct 2002, 8:25 PM
Hi Poet,
Ok maybe there are, I will keep looking, I have to consider the voting farsical however having seen what people are doing with it. A snow flake is unlikely to melt on the nose of a snow as snowmen are made of snow, so it is right in its element. Yes obviously it is not mean't to be a deeply meaningful poem confronting the ills of modern society.
I rather like the first stanza, then it loses it's momentum.
the rhyme scheme of the last stanza has some merit. I suggest you take a writing class. Also find what you love and read it til it falls apart.
also. the thought of you achieving your phd in any subject let alone medicine...is highly disturbing to me. perhaps you juggle?
for what a day a year a minute...regardless. this piece lacks energy, intelligence and the wisdom of somebody who at least has a clue as to what they're talking about. if this was a political science essay you would fail miserably whether you were in a capatilist country and or a socialist country. too bad. i had such high hopes for you too.
while squatting on the phone (should add at end)
was it supposed to be.
i really liked this even though it was of a graphic nature
I believe you mean, "....A whistle's blown..." and the spelling is 'faggot' in reference to the wood-related meaning of 'faggot'.
I'd like to know how YOU wash
I like this
Self-help poems..yes...
Yes... yes... she does rather deserve better than you. Rather.
Actually, I don't know the lady. Maybe she does deserve you. But if that's so, I can't imagine what she did in a past life. Poor thing.