some deleted user
on Gemini by susie
6 Oct 2002, 4:06 AM
Great poem I love it, 9 for you girl!!
your words and your hearth are in tune
I guess you don't
Understand what I am talking
About, but someday
Someday, you will...
well in that part of the poem, you say the reader will understand, but i dont think i will, sorry. i wish i could, but this poem is too fucking out there for me man. sorry, i guess im not up to par on your plane of existence or something, oh well.
well, hmm, whatever floats your boat i suppose, what can i say?
try now...z...go for dear ms.sexton..i was just listening to it..it worked fine...hey flatliner. nice poem.
PMS, I was nostalgic. >:\
don't do it johnnie. i may be a zzinnia, but who amongst you can vouchsafe my beauty, or lack thereof? and therefore, how can you compare her to me, or mrs.g, or razor? well, i guess you can since all's fair in love and poetry... except for you, h, you tease. the mp3's don't work, yeh wee bastard!
i couldn't.
he is..symbolically what's wrong with america..the song on gangbox.com gives it much more thrusting injustice... we all know a couple of joes now don't we?! joe.
hey loneshadow--this has promise. i suggest making the language more languid. it reads stacato, and if you are longing for her, i'd think the words would be more sultry, more mellifluous, more dreamy. good effort, though. z
cannot undertsand why u got the 1's and 0's... i like this one
Thanks for the encouragement. I must say, this one was harder to write - I just don't do as well with the "happier" ones. Its harder to stay in the spirit.
I actually think this is brilliant. Can't understand the negative responses. Right up there with Anne Sexton's "Fury of Cocks".
If I give it a high vote will I sacrifice your place in the worst list?
I really liked it!very tender and heart-piercing!BUT what on earth means that HORRIBLE homepage?if you really feel your poems you'd better do away with that page!That was not Sorrow nor despair and not even nothingness!I felt really disapointed!I hope you change your mental picture!Horror!
I Agreed
again, i cant relate, maybe if you wrote more about porn or stars, or porn stars!
hmm, i wish this sort of poetry interested me so i could praise this poem, but i do not connect, sorry, the porn star sonnet was a slam dunk though
nice use of the word schmuck