Re: Arab Shepherd (a belief poem for Dovina) by zodiac	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	6-Apr-05/1:45 PM
Public or private, quite good. I have never seen a pillar of salt unless it was contained.
Re: Biased. by darby pyn	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	6-Apr-05/10:04 AM
nice
Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	6-Apr-05/10:01 AM
you have the unnerving habit of writing poems twice the length they need to be, have you considered seeing the dali exhibit in philly?
Re: ?? by timvick473662003	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	6-Apr-05/9:57 AM
to pimply
Re: Love Spoke by MistressSnow	the_poetess 66.28.32.66	6-Apr-05/9:55 AM
im not a fan of rhyming and lines 34 & 36 don't even rhyme..
Re: Everytime by krazymofo321	dancin_n_da_moonlite 66.28.32.66	6-Apr-05/9:50 AM
nice sentiment but its really not that original, and sounds kind of pimply
Re: Arab Shepherd (a belief poem for Dovina) by zodiac	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/9:21 AM
I don’t know why you add to a good title, the phrase, “a belief poem for Dovina” unless your firmly standing shepherd reminds you of firm belief, and I either do not, or do, or also write about belief. In any case, it flows well, but I think you sacrifice too much clarity for form. Introducing the old English “’twas” so late in the poem, for example, and not using old English again, shows a strong desire to maintain meter. And that whole sentence is cumbersome. Shouldn’t “love” be “Love,” as a name?
Re: Golden Sands by Hadasl	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:58 AM
Too etherial, I think, to make the jump from earthly sand to heavenly sand without some transition. Nice thought though.
Re: Celestial Veil by Hadasl	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:53 AM
The rebuttal has usually been, “That’s why He made humans.”
Re: a comment on Prayer For The Church by sliver	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:39 AM
that's not too bad a definition of prayer.
Re: a comment on Prayer For The Church by sliver	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:34 AM
When I said, “No to both you and zodiac,” I was saying that that way of looking at prayer has always led nowhere. I admittedly sidestepped the issues you raised, and addressed prayer from the position of people who pray, which I think carries some validity that you are sidestepping when you reduce prayer to illogical guff. (Sorry, you didn’t say that, but I think it’s where you’re headed.) You do not have to answer the concerns I raised in the above comments any more than I have to answer yours.
Re: a comment on No Worries by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:10 AM
I have defined closed mindedness in several ways and at several times during this discussion, and I think it's abundently clear what I mean by the term. If you wish to review each statement I have made for its grammatical clarity and correctness, please do so with someoine else. I am not interested in that at this point. It might have made a difference several days ago, but now everyone but you seems to know where I stand on that.
Re: a comment on No Worries by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/8:03 AM
If you can prove that he cannot change the original description without telling the truth sometimes, then you are right. But don't give some trivial example. We are dealing with an intelligent deceiver.
Re: a comment on Make Music in Your Heart by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/7:55 AM
Seldom does someone comment on one of my poems as you have done here. They usually raise other issues, often having nothing to do with the poem, with which I often argue. You have stated your opinion of the poem, and I accept it.
Re: a comment on What I Exist For by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/7:50 AM
"but You are so far away" from what? What do you mean?
Re: a comment on Moments (or) Suicide by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.10.85	6-Apr-05/7:43 AM
My life evaluated like this (according to the ratio of good Moments to total Moments that I’ve remembered) might be considered, in some dark hour, (perhaps an hour in which suicide seems appropriate) not just bunk, but as in this ordinary hour, for its (my life’s) just evaluation.
Re: Moments (or) Suicide by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.212	6-Apr-05/3:49 AM
I don't follow the last sentence. Are you going to be evaluated for the 70% ratio, or for your failure to have more Moments in thirty-something years of existing?
Re: Nothingness by beck2457	zodiac 212.118.19.212	6-Apr-05/3:45 AM
It wasn't very interesting, except to you.
Re: Yesterdays testament by Caducus	zodiac 212.118.19.212	6-Apr-05/3:45 AM
The Bible lies, not lays.
Re: Hanging Gallows by Hadasl	zodiac 212.118.19.212	6-Apr-05/3:39 AM
"here" should be "hear" "Poseidon's wheeze" should be anything else.