on Virus by bluwiz
18 Sep 2002, 8:38 AM
Ther's a lot of truth to this, and to your Infection poem as well - you handle metaphor very well.
on some deleted poem
20 Sep 2002, 1:20 AM
It was obviously a sexed up time on poemranker last night. Shame I wasn't around to add my own two-penn'orth to the whole horse/man dilemma. My first experience of sex was when the horse i was riding vigorously mounted a young mare while i was still on its back. Ever since I have felt somewhat in awe of our equine friends. But I don't have a room full of them. I've been very careful, oh Queen of Bigamy, and stuck to just a couple of ladies. Seems much easier!
on "REAL" People by Scouser
19 Sep 2002, 7:39 AM
These a very valid points, given that we're on the brink of a war that no one wants... (in UK anyway)
on some deleted poem
19 Sep 2002, 7:43 AM
This is the only one of yours I haven't commented on yet. It's not my favourite perhaps because it sounds Biblical (Song of Solomon) in tone to me and that always puts me off, but the ending has the right crushed feeling.
on some deleted poem
19 Sep 2002, 2:14 AM
Great stuff as usual. This sounds like the song of Everywoman.
on I hate people by Bazilla
19 Sep 2002, 2:34 AM
I think you just need some friends....
on Baked Peach Cobbler Windowed by horus8
19 Sep 2002, 3:01 AM
Uncles are rarely trustworthy. Keep your distance.
on A Passing Love by razorgrin
18 Sep 2002, 7:02 AM
The comments on this poem have become seriously deranged.... I just like the story of your poem. Drugging your lovers is the best way of maintaining a relationship. But the first stanza doesn't rhyme in my accent - we say 'sconn' not 'scown'. Please be more considerate of your southern English readers.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2002, 6:37 AM
I don't really understand what's going on here, but the sound of the verse is lovely.
on 1 of 2,543 things she does that starts fires in your grassland heart. by mogwai
18 Sep 2002, 7:36 AM
It is a great suggestive title and maybe it would be nice to see it taken up in the poem itself, but I still like the scene that's presented here.
on Freeform (No votes yet) 0 comments by abecedarian
18 Sep 2002, 7:53 AM
It is the same for us all. By the way, if you are an abecedarian don't you believe that it's wrong to learn to read? What are you doing on a poetry site?
on dps 2 - new ver. by decadentlaurel
18 Sep 2002, 8:05 AM
Version 1 is much better than this - simpler, more honest, less 'poetic'.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2002, 6:39 AM
How dare you post a description o me and then pretend that it is P&K! How you know these things about me I couldn't say, but the likeness is frightening.
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2002, 6:42 AM
This is the kind of dream that could send a man mad. Please let this not be P&K, for I shall fear him even more
on some deleted poem
18 Sep 2002, 5:50 AM
I can't believe that I haven't voted on this poem despite suggesting titles and god knows what else - what an oversight. Did you check out some Ted Hughes?
I wonder if the room with walls the colour of heartblood is actually a metaphor for your heart? The alliteration of 'w' is good, creating the effect of the woind. And don't get rid of the definite articles because they give this poem a knotty, medieval rhythm that sits well with the wolves.
on Stifled by wordsphincter
18 Sep 2002, 7:32 AM
What are stolen lips? Give them back. The last line makes no sense - your eyes may never grasp courts? the nocturnal companion courts something that the eys will enver grasp? I've never seen eyes grasping anything anyway - yeuurch.
on Little lady by dolores
19 Sep 2002, 7:44 AM
I like this - there's a big implied story behind the poem. The simplicity of what the girl 'says' is very childlike.