on Internet Inspiration (Dovina) revised by jroday
21 Dec 2004, 3:08 PM
Thank you for reposting this and for the kind sentiment.
on Horror at the grotto by scitz
21 Dec 2004, 4:14 PM
funny, sad
on some deleted poem
21 Dec 2004, 5:07 PM
Good meter with a quiet feel.
on I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe
22 Dec 2004, 10:43 AM
So your goodbye was not final.
We have two theories here on Poemranker:
1. Poets, who are dim, write nonsense.
2. Poets who are dim write nonsense.
I see -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. adheres to both.
Which do you prefer?
We have two theories here on Poemranker:
1. Poets, who are dim, write nonsense.
2. Poets who are dim write nonsense.
I see -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. adheres to both.
Which do you prefer?
on The Slave by Bhaskaryya
22 Dec 2004, 10:47 AM
Good.
Line 2 - "And rest"
Ling 3 - "descending."
Line 2 - "And rest"
Ling 3 - "descending."
on Sidestepping Stupor by PsydewaysTears
22 Dec 2004, 10:51 AM
At least you're not assuming we know the setting this time. This is good. Verses 5,6 and 7 need some opening transition, I think.
on Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Dec 2004, 5:14 PM
Retibution is only exceeded in sweetness by ridicule.
on Andrew part II by Spindle
22 Dec 2004, 5:23 PM
restrain->restraint
"love's soothing touch AND scalding strike" good line.
It did seem like killing myself the first time he did that. You're right, it's about virginity.
"love's soothing touch AND scalding strike" good line.
It did seem like killing myself the first time he did that. You're right, it's about virginity.
on AL-NAAFIYSH by blacksoul
25 Dec 2004, 10:56 AM
In putting a familiar saying with the name AL-NAAFIYSH, are you commenting on his life or his art? I don't know enough about him to say.
I could comment on the saying, but you're getting at something here that I don't understand.
I could comment on the saying, but you're getting at something here that I don't understand.
on Upon a Wooden Cross by wolfinaunicornsuit
23 Dec 2004, 5:54 PM
You've lost me here. Except for a few glimmers, I'm looking into darkness. What's going on?
on some deleted poem
23 Dec 2004, 12:02 PM
You prayed to nothing, and nothing, i.e., God, raped you?
on there's no way out by oneglove
23 Dec 2004, 1:15 PM
More kind to whom?
on Lies of Societyâs Guise by PsydewaysTears
24 Dec 2004, 12:15 PM
"Lies of Societyâs Guise" is redundant. Why not "Lies of Society."
on Writer's Block by Bhaskaryya
24 Dec 2004, 12:21 PM
And thus you wrote this.
Try reading some of the ridiculous comments on Poemranker. They're inspiring!
"I can't catch a single one on paper"
on some deleted poem
27 Dec 2004, 2:22 PM
While standing there nude, thinking about her with the hot shower running, the mirror fogged and the blade slipped â necro-fogslippage. Yes, nomenclature is everything.
on Transition by Miggy
27 Dec 2004, 2:37 PM
Better grammar would help I think, even for a song. This is not simply a matter of an old prude telling a young songwriter about grammatical orderliness, it is a matter of clarity.
on Oh well, shit happens by sir_heff
27 Dec 2004, 2:40 PM
You still like "un-bias"????
It's worth more than 0, but give up on becoming her god of gods. I wouldn't wish that on any man.
It's worth more than 0, but give up on becoming her god of gods. I wouldn't wish that on any man.
no comma after bring.
"No longer will I look, without regret," is a bit clunky.