Yeah, several have said similar things. Thanks. I've already revised it, and could ropost, but usually don't. I find it more useful to incorporate any insights or angsts into the new thing.

Do we dare ask?

Please stop wallowing in your beer, it's not manly. You have not failed miserably. You have succeeded in showing a facet of God that is not commonly shown, and which I rather like. And even a little more Biblical reference would be okay in this setting. I see it as recognition of God's goodness in making us, and His even betterness in making us so good that perhaps we don't need Him after childhood. I find it a concept worth pondering, but not completely agreeable.

Sorry, I don't get it.

Yes, I see how the grandmother gave him what he needed and sent him out, like God does in your poem. But "scope" is unclear, except that it rhymes, and what does "to keep the waters still" mean?

I understand the last four lines, but they seem like a summary of what has already been preached (and I've already said that I don't mind the preaching in this pooem. That would not be bad, except that the closing lines are dogmatic ("it is God's plan") and bland ("his good children"), and only the last line seems important. Sorry to stomp on your children, accidentally of course.

What on earth do you mean? I always want a gentleman!

It's always good to know a man's genetics before any serious discussion. Thanks for giving yours. And please stick around this time.

The "Mood . . ." sentenced is vague and bland at written, in my opinion. Your explanation of it is crisp and clear. So although my question is satisfied, the sentence is still not so good.

We want them to be gentle, that’s all. And we know it’s not their nature, at least for many rams. The poem overstates that, I admit, but it’s for emphasis. Good point.

These are good observations and suggestions. I’ve made revisions based of some of them, though you don’t see them here. Thanks.

Your comments on poems by others have likewise seemed worthwhile. I see you’ve been commenting since 11/02, but your poems are few and recent. I am much newer here and can’t help wondering what username you went by then and what happened to the many poems you must have posted before this January. No answer is necessary, and I won’t keep bugging. It’s good have you around.

I have just given birth. test that for irony.

Yes, but for the glympse, the occasional light, the bang for the buck spent. Don't take anything on poemranker too literally.

No, really it's just not understanding what people mean most of the time and trying to sort it out.

I agree with Alchemy here, and don't understand what you're getting at on the INTRANSIT poem.

In a place where good means bad, and bad good, my one-liners are good.