replying on Oceans love song by Stacy Stewart
11 Mar 2005, 4:30 PM
The last 2 lines I didn't put in at first. But when I read it back I thought something was missing and so this how the last two lines were created. Weak yes, but for now they work untill I can think of something better. But Yes I agree with what you are saying.
replying on Affairs by Stacy Stewart
6 Jan 2005, 11:03 PM
what is our world with out love and compassion? So w/ that being said when you find that one somebody and then they betray you we are back at square one again.... This is why I wrote the words downfall to man. As for the emotion leading up to this:
"utteringthe words of complete chaos (I LOVE YOU) that
ignites unholy thoughts (thinking of the other person), unveiling
inner desires kept dormant in
our sleep. Dreaming of worlds
where the candles are lit and
roses mean something to us." ( dreaming of being w/ the other person) for now the love is not drawn towards the partner but drawn towards the other person...
"utteringthe words of complete chaos (I LOVE YOU) that
ignites unholy thoughts (thinking of the other person), unveiling
inner desires kept dormant in
our sleep. Dreaming of worlds
where the candles are lit and
roses mean something to us." ( dreaming of being w/ the other person) for now the love is not drawn towards the partner but drawn towards the other person...
replying on Affairs by Stacy Stewart
6 Jan 2005, 7:17 PM
"tis" has been edited since it was the wrong word to use i suppose. But embers sofly spoken is correct.....what are embers but burning pieces of wood...what noice do they make...crakling. Instead of saying crackling i used softly spoken.
For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in.
Did this clear things up a bit?
For the downfall of man, the whole poem leads up to this, for the poem itself is talking about love....and with love that is not "perfect" you have an affair....for that is where the downfall part came in.
Did this clear things up a bit?
on Happy by Acid_moose
3 Jan 2005, 11:05 AM
This reminded me of Gacy. With the whole Killing Kids and being a clown thing. I liked it!
on Hurt by Princess_Snowflake
13 Dec 2004, 9:36 AM
You have to many mistakes in here. The rhyme is off. Alot of your sentances don't make sence.
Example:
that has caught your own eye
and makes you think
it's better than it was.
that has cought your eye
etc etc...Reread this poem and fix the mistakes.
Example:
that has caught your own eye
and makes you think
it's better than it was.
that has cought your eye
etc etc...Reread this poem and fix the mistakes.
on My Life As a Single Teenage Girl by Princess_Snowflake
13 Dec 2004, 9:32 AM
This is not a Haiku
A haiku has 5,7,5 and is about nature
Say the count was right then it would be a Senriu, those are about humans.
A haiku has 5,7,5 and is about nature
Say the count was right then it would be a Senriu, those are about humans.
on Cassandra. by SupremeDreamer
8 Dec 2004, 7:26 AM
Aahh I'm going through this right now:
Believes HE can seduce me with a dance
Clings to me and purrs and ultimately fails.
To put it bluntly it this poem was a car your transmission just slipped.
Overall I thought this poem was lacking in rhythm.
Believes HE can seduce me with a dance
Clings to me and purrs and ultimately fails.
To put it bluntly it this poem was a car your transmission just slipped.
Overall I thought this poem was lacking in rhythm.
on Dancing in Memories: Slipping Away In The House On The Hill by Stacy Stewart
8 Dec 2004, 5:18 AM
My own version of: MUSIC SWIMS BACK TO ME
By: Anne Sexton.
By: Anne Sexton.
on The ABC's Of Adultery by horus8
8 Dec 2004, 4:33 AM
Finally ending in the the ABC's of Divorce.
Thanks, I understand what you guys are saying.