poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Tintagiles (301-320)

Comments byTintagiles, 301–320 back. Include replies

on Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on 29 Oct 2002, 9:12 PM
Excellent moments, but needs work.
on morning by kiki 29 Oct 2002, 9:05 PM
'Basel movements'?
on some deleted poem 29 Oct 2002, 10:17 PM
All right, all right, all right, I believe you when you say you were a genius back then too. Did I ever doubt you? It's sort of nice to know that even then you could write far, far better than most of the people on here can now. Now then, should I vote on this as I would if I didn't know the title, or vote on it taking your age into account...
on Beer by Yardbird 29 Oct 2002, 9:13 AM
Though I agree with your verdict on beer (though may I add it should be 'horse piss'), as a poem this is almost as detestable as the subject. Or was that the point?
on End of life by kliq 29 Oct 2002, 7:35 PM
It starts amusingly, but the ending is ridiculous.
on Are you spreading it? by Voth269 29 Oct 2002, 7:40 PM
No. I am not. It is extremely sanctimonious and boring. I prefer to blaspheme. Bathe in holy water. Get drunk on Christ's blood. Grow fat on consecrated wafers. Burn crucifixes. Laugh at modern churches that look like spaceships about to take off. Hide in the confession booth and read porn to the priest. I must not think about this question, because I know I am not spreading it. I am spreading my own self-glorification. I am laughing in the face of God and burning Bibles. As for the fate I reserve to this poem, I cannot decide, because the Bible at least has some literary merit
on The Black Hearted Sunflower by anitawit 29 Oct 2002, 9:08 AM
Though I can be a pedantic purist, in this case, I simply don't find it a very good poem, haiku or not.
on Selfish by darby pyn 29 Oct 2002, 9:09 AM
Not bad. Not bloody bad at all. Just one little thing, 'foretell' is the verb. The noun is 'fortelling'. I.e., 'A foretell' makes no sense.
on some deleted poem 28 Oct 2002, 7:55 PM
I suggest you figure out WHAT this request is, and simply present it. This is quite boring. And 'I need time to be alone, to restore myself spiritually and to gain focus' is quite simply dreadful
on other by ThreeFourSix 28 Oct 2002, 7:57 PM
This is amusing. But it could be such better poetry, and just as funny. I judge it as poetry and deem it bad.
on ... by logun2002ya 28 Oct 2002, 8:00 PM
Quite obvious you were never good in English. I'll let you in on a secret: 'I', as in the pronoun that means 'me', is spelt 'I', not 'eye'. 'Eye' is your eye, as in the gooey thing stuck in your skull you use to see. Much quicker to just write 'I'.
on some deleted poem 28 Oct 2002, 8:20 PM
Go put on your bunny costume, it will make much more sense for you to want to fuck them then.
on advice for the heated by <~> 28 Oct 2002, 8:31 PM
Curses. I thought this was going to be advice to God's wife and Blabbit. How could you dissapoint me so! Sgnif.
on some deleted poem 27 Oct 2002, 10:07 AM
The hell with the ovaltine.
on some deleted poem 26 Oct 2002, 6:57 PM
Frankly, I think this keeps getting worse and worse at each revision.
on some deleted poem 26 Oct 2002, 6:58 PM
Change the last four words. For God's sake change them.
on some deleted poem 26 Oct 2002, 7:01 PM
To be pedantic, while it is true that in its early Italian days the sonnet occasionally varied its number of lines, up to twenty, it has internationally stabilised at 14. Also, it has a rhyme scheme. This poem has neither. Just thought I'd let you know. Also, 'I will bend when I need to bend' sounds suspiciously naughty to prurient minds like mine and others'.
on Bleeding by invernalmariposa 28 Oct 2002, 7:56 PM
The last two or three lines are perhaps of value.
on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~> 28 Oct 2002, 8:28 PM
Just change the title.
on Surpass the Dream by darkhelmet10 26 Oct 2002, 6:55 PM
Poor her.