on Perfect by confuzdlilgirl
24 Oct 2002, 7:08 PM
Far from perfect.
on Rain Doesn't Seem to Stop by ThoughtfulSoul
26 Oct 2002, 6:32 PM
This poem definitely is a tradegy. A great tradegy.
I do believe I have stepped onto holy ground. Who could have guessed there were so many angels in the world, and who all wrote poemes? Have these people no imagination, no capability to think of some other name? Or are they merely all so self-aggrandising that they take themselves for things above the human? Pah! And people call me pretentious.
on Is It Love by angel_uy
26 Oct 2002, 6:38 PM
Has anyone ever told you that all your poems sound the same?
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2002, 8:16 AM
As a poem, bad. As America-bashing, also bad. Far too blatant. Try something more subtle, that they don't remember -- like how their Navy got its motto.
Actually, I think I'll go do that.
Actually, I think I'll go do that.
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2002, 8:30 AM
I like it, but for some reason the last line seems displaced. Maybe it would work better if it were placed differently or something? Something in the style of 'And gave it to her, and she calmed down/and kissed him' maybe? I don't know, it irks me a little.
on My love for another. by cleverdevice
25 Oct 2002, 8:32 AM
To be pedantic, 'peaceful' and 'fool' don't really rhyme. But then maybe you have a strange accent.
on The Elephant Olympics by Yardbird
25 Oct 2002, 8:33 AM
This must be one of the greatest attacks on political correctness I've ever read. We need more like this. Cheers!
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2002, 8:35 AM
Just one comment -- I think the line 'That wearing...' etc could have been ever better.
on Drinker's Haiku by cacophony
25 Oct 2002, 8:35 AM
All you have to do is put some salt on the red wine stains and they'll be easy to make dissapear. Really.
on Living Conditions by Christof
25 Oct 2002, 8:38 AM
-=Dark_Angel=- is going to have something to say about the third line, methinks...
on Hated by Ninoy_Instigator
24 Oct 2002, 11:57 AM
You did do something boring. This poem. Don't you think comparing yourself to Christ, Malcolm, Rizal and King is a bit pretentious? Though I'm glad you kept Lincoln, Kennedy, and Rabin out of the list. Though you might have added Lumumba and Gandhi.
on George Bush, Jesus Christ, and the good ole US of A! by dougsoderstrom
24 Oct 2002, 12:06 PM
This is no better. It is still a badly put statement of the very obvious. It's as idiotic as anything Bush ever said.
Actually, if it was written this badly as an ironic statement on Bush's inability to speak coherently, it's a work of genius. But I somehow doubt that.
Actually, if it was written this badly as an ironic statement on Bush's inability to speak coherently, it's a work of genius. But I somehow doubt that.
on some deleted poem
23 Oct 2002, 7:44 PM
How nice, it took two days before the edit came. This really does amuse me -- the endless revoting, not the poem. Not to imply that the poem is bad. It just isn't a funny poem. I think I may have preferred it as it was last time I voted, but then perhaps I recollect awry.
on George Bush, Jesus Christ, and the good ole US of A! by dougsoderstrom
23 Oct 2002, 11:22 AM
Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah. Remarkalbly boring, this series.
on Violent edge by kliq
23 Oct 2002, 11:23 AM
Come on now. You know she enjoys it.
on some deleted poem
24 Oct 2002, 11:59 AM
Better.
on Shadow's First Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29
25 Oct 2002, 9:17 AM
Amusing.
on Friends Beyond the Storm by loneshadow29
25 Oct 2002, 9:18 AM
Blah blah blah blah -- what is more cliched that storms, harbours, beacons? Have you no imagination?
on some deleted poem
24 Oct 2002, 12:02 PM
Sentence structure extremely poor in the attempt to catch rhymes. The second, eighth, and final two lines are exemplary of that.