on Suicide Dream by Ranger
24 Jul 2006, 7:06 PM
The introduction almost makes me wonder if the narrator killed her.
on Life Goes On by Edna Sweetlove
24 Jul 2006, 6:57 PM
Ob-La-Di, Ob-La-Da!
replying on Contractual Paradox of the Old by Dovina
24 Jul 2006, 6:41 PM
The 5 yr. plan was an obscure reference to the scene in the Adam Sandler movie Big Daddy where he asks his girlfreind why she's dumping him for a much older man. Here's the lines that follow:
Vanessa: "He has a five year plan."
Sonny: "What is it? 'Don't die'?"
Vanessa: "He has a five year plan."
Sonny: "What is it? 'Don't die'?"
replying on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta
24 Jul 2006, 6:26 PM
"trees arch like a whores back"-Priceless
Those are some damn sexy trees :-)
Those are some damn sexy trees :-)
replying on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta
20 Jul 2006, 12:42 PM
Dovina read it sexually not me, I'm innocent I sware. Apperantly my mind is not on sex all the time which is actually a new revelation to me, I always assumed it was.
on To Talitha by amanda_dcosta
20 Jul 2006, 12:34 PM
True story: while walking home from my art class when I lived in Pittsburgh I saw a girl in a wheelchair contorted and obviously mentally and physically handycapped. She seemed happy at the time and she was holding in her hand a box. It was a board game with the word LIFE written across it in bold letters. I always wanted to make a painting of that.
I agree with Dovina though on the "Healthy wealthy" cliche.
I agree with Dovina though on the "Healthy wealthy" cliche.
on Contractual Paradox of the Old by Dovina
20 Jul 2006, 12:26 PM
This reminds me of the movie "Network". You should rent it and pay attention to the love story part of the movie. The part with Faye Dunawaye and that old guy. Also, I wonder if this guy has a five year plan.
This sounds more like someone's diary entry than a poem meant to evoke the readers feelings or thoughts.
This sounds more like someone's diary entry than a poem meant to evoke the readers feelings or thoughts.
replying on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta
19 Jul 2006, 10:20 AM
Yeah but my hearts in the right place ;-)
on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
19 Jul 2006, 10:14 AM
I can't get chat to work for me, sorry.
replying on I'm Learning To Drive by amanda_dcosta
16 Jul 2006, 11:42 PM
What I can't understand is why I didn't read it as sexual and you did. What, did we swap brains that day or something?
She just got inducted into the Black Entertainment hall of fame.
On a less happy note BET just cancelled it's most important contribution to society. I speak of none other than the unforgetable, undeniably uncensored "BET Uncut" Featuring thong donned beauties gyrating to such hits as "Werk Dat Twerk Dat" "What's that thing smell like?" "Booty Poppin'" and "I's a Pimp, You's A Trick". We will miss you "Uncut". Whatever will we do Thursday through Saturday at 3am to replace you?
On a less happy note BET just cancelled it's most important contribution to society. I speak of none other than the unforgetable, undeniably uncensored "BET Uncut" Featuring thong donned beauties gyrating to such hits as "Werk Dat Twerk Dat" "What's that thing smell like?" "Booty Poppin'" and "I's a Pimp, You's A Trick". We will miss you "Uncut". Whatever will we do Thursday through Saturday at 3am to replace you?
replying on Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo
14 Jul 2006, 9:33 PM
It's more like a double entendre in which one entendre prematurely ejaculates into the other entendre.
on Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo
13 Jul 2006, 7:02 PM
It's all about the finish with the long ones and this one is orgasmic.
replying on Selkie (An Antique of Lurid Partes - w/Girl on Girl Action!) by ecargo
13 Jul 2006, 7:00 PM
Told you so E...
Expect many more accolades to come.
Expect many more accolades to come.
on I hate making titles by drnick
13 Jul 2006, 6:45 PM
This is a good description. If it was a metaphor for something it would be amazing but it seems to not be attached to any thing specific except a row of trees. Maybe a title like "State Park" or something would help give it more of a setting.
on Jennifer Logan by rahson_s
12 Jul 2006, 10:21 AM
Honesty is the best policy. This is just fine the way it is.
on count the photos by the indign
12 Jul 2006, 10:12 AM
Edit please.
replying on An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic
12 Jul 2006, 9:15 AM
I thought he was just acting British and speaking of a Lord of an estate. The other way would just make it a silly distraction.
on An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic
12 Jul 2006, 9:10 AM
Would have made Poe grin.
on The Lonesome Loser by Dovina
12 Jul 2006, 8:05 AM
"He scans the walls
for someone who might,
bends forward againâ
maybe tonight." -Haha, does this mean he's gay? Just Kiddin'.
It's really good actually. You feel sympathetic and understand the loser's possition when you read the poem but also you still feel like he's a loser.
Very nice sketch of a complex personality.
for someone who might,
bends forward againâ
maybe tonight." -Haha, does this mean he's gay? Just Kiddin'.
It's really good actually. You feel sympathetic and understand the loser's possition when you read the poem but also you still feel like he's a loser.
Very nice sketch of a complex personality.