on of Arabia by ecargo
12 Jul 2006, 7:55 AM
Nicely written but to the epicness of the picture is lost in such a short poem. The second stanza should be stanza 10 and not 2.
Actually I prefer to spell it "Chaka Khan" http://www.chakakhan.com/
on Joshua And Ruth by amanda_dcosta
8 Jul 2006, 2:45 AM
"Suffer the little children to come unto Me, and forbid them not, for of such is the Kingdom of God."
Children will always remind us of what really matters.
Children will always remind us of what really matters.
on PHOTO by madamefrufru
7 Jul 2006, 11:18 AM
The last stanza seems a little strange but the rest is good. I like your unlikely word choices.
replying on Songs of the hedge bird by ALChemy
5 Jul 2006, 2:25 PM
No need to worry about our little friend. He's in birdy heaven. I doubt much can harm him now.
replying on O say, can you see? by Dovina
4 Jul 2006, 7:16 AM
It's just "bounded" to me implies actual borders or walls.
replying on Songs of the hedge bird by ALChemy
3 Jul 2006, 10:35 AM
Thanks D. I like the way you put that.
replying on Songs of the hedge bird by ALChemy
3 Jul 2006, 10:29 AM
I'm glad it matched it's inspiration.
on August 23, 1944 - 102 miles west of Paris by Ranger
3 Jul 2006, 6:18 AM
Just watched "Saving Private Ryan" didn't you? Captured the end quite well and with few words.
on sayndewicches by FreeFormFixation
3 Jul 2006, 6:13 AM
Caught the moment just right. Like reading Dr Suess on a bad acid trip.
replying on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
3 Jul 2006, 6:05 AM
Giants always appear to be lazy, think about it. The Jolly Green Giant and Paul Bunyan are my only exceptions.
on Higher education by ecargo
3 Jul 2006, 5:58 AM
I think I like it but it's probably because I'm reading the last verse as sexual innuendo.
on O say, can you see? by Dovina
3 Jul 2006, 5:35 AM
The poem sounds like a battle along some border but I have no idea what border battle you're implying. Still I like the beat poet intensity of it's cadence.
on Goliath by amanda_dcosta
2 Jul 2006, 1:39 AM
This poem remind me of a painting by Goya:
http://www.pkimaging.com/pic/mikp/art/go
and a lithograph by Goya: http://www.artchive.com/artchive/g/goya/
Good take on the Goliath theme.
http://www.pkimaging.com/pic/mikp/art/go
and a lithograph by Goya: http://www.artchive.com/artchive/g/goya/
Good take on the Goliath theme.
replying on Aristocrats(Madlib for all those shock poets) by ALChemy
30 Jun 2006, 7:59 PM
I can tell you read the original. I salute you for finding a way to make this disgusting joke only mildly offensive. This joke goes all the way back to Vaudeville days and a documentary featuring 100 celebrity comedians telling the joke was made. Just thought these shock poets should know where their roots are.
on Fallen Charub by Dovina
30 Jun 2006, 10:53 AM
2 dozen roses mailed to the address of Dovina Goddess of the Grey-blue ocean of poetry.
replying on A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta
29 Jun 2006, 11:00 AM
I just click the word "chat". Dang we were expecting you too. We were quite disappointed. She has all kinds of gossip for you.
I very happy to see you back by the way.
PS. Stop disappearing for weeks at a time dangit. This place ain't the same without you.
I very happy to see you back by the way.
PS. Stop disappearing for weeks at a time dangit. This place ain't the same without you.
on Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove
25 Jun 2006, 8:20 AM
Yep, satire.