replying on All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove
25 Jun 2006, 6:29 AM
Everything you write is a satire of yourself.
on All Hail! All Hail! America The Golden! by Edna Sweetlove
24 Jun 2006, 12:05 PM
Oh poor old mad English poet.
You wish for the days of yore
when the world spat at your name
and called your queen a whore.
But alas your torch has been passed
to a younger more vibrant shore
as your empire rots away like your teeth
and the world now thinks you're a bore.
You wish for the days of yore
when the world spat at your name
and called your queen a whore.
But alas your torch has been passed
to a younger more vibrant shore
as your empire rots away like your teeth
and the world now thinks you're a bore.
on Chord before the crescendo by Caducus
24 Jun 2006, 11:40 AM
Alway's the fine craftsman Cad.
on My secret to life by amanda_dcosta
23 Jun 2006, 6:20 AM
I liked this alot. Especially the last half. Very inspirational. I'll probably be stuck at the DMV half the day today but I get 4 days off from work (WaHoo!:) So maybe I can catch up on my poem reading here and get in some good debates again.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
22 Jun 2006, 7:52 AM
Would love to read your paper some day.
Evolution has a problem without mutation. Evolution without mutation will mathmatically and of course logically reach a platue at which there is no more room for improvement/change.
But what is mutation? Some kind of accident or an act of god or niether. What causes a rhino to be born with an extra horn? Well ramblings aside- Last time I checked the US was gettin' whooped, But it's not as big over here at least not yet.
Evolution has a problem without mutation. Evolution without mutation will mathmatically and of course logically reach a platue at which there is no more room for improvement/change.
But what is mutation? Some kind of accident or an act of god or niether. What causes a rhino to be born with an extra horn? Well ramblings aside- Last time I checked the US was gettin' whooped, But it's not as big over here at least not yet.
replying on A Sexy Crucifixion Poem by Edna Sweetlove
21 Jun 2006, 6:33 AM
I don't want to burn in hell for giving it a ten. I spotted you a couple on some of the other poems though.
on Let's praise great Britannia's golden days of now and then by Edna Sweetlove
20 Jun 2006, 5:37 AM
Did this all come out of the Redcoat comment? It was all in good fun ya'know.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
20 Jun 2006, 5:22 AM
No, I got it the first time. I only hope you don't interpret the sarcasm I used on Edna Sweetlove in one of her poems as anti-English. To think I'm always warning everyone else about written sarcasm and there I went doing it.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
20 Jun 2006, 5:16 AM
If only our atheist friends were here. Right now it's like a soccer match with only one team playing. It is funny how "facts" can be interpreted in so many different ways. makes it hard to argue that they were facts in the first place.
How'd the exams go?
How'd the exams go?
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
18 Jun 2006, 9:42 AM
Yep.
replying on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove
18 Jun 2006, 9:39 AM
Dear Edna: Such a lady-like response, I'm impressed. How does the English "nigger" version end? Do tell.
PS. I could hardly imagine you liking my more sensitive writing.
PS. I could hardly imagine you liking my more sensitive writing.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
17 Jun 2006, 8:53 PM
I'm getting confused now. Do you mean the battle between me and D.A. or the great religious debate that ended in Zodiac and ecargo no longer talking to me and eventually leaving the ranker?
I just didn't think Dark Angel was a girl and I don't remember having a battle with Amanda. -or has D.A. now changed his name to Sweetlove.
I just didn't think Dark Angel was a girl and I don't remember having a battle with Amanda. -or has D.A. now changed his name to Sweetlove.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
17 Jun 2006, 10:50 AM
Her? Maybe but certainly no lady.
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
17 Jun 2006, 10:47 AM
Good to see you again.
Stanzas 4 and 5 get a little too "Frosty the Snowman" with their metaphors for me (with the magician's hat thing) and I'm not sure if Eternity should be capitalized but the rest of the poem is a really nice sentement and the rhythm is spot on.
Stanzas 4 and 5 get a little too "Frosty the Snowman" with their metaphors for me (with the magician's hat thing) and I'm not sure if Eternity should be capitalized but the rest of the poem is a really nice sentement and the rhythm is spot on.
replying on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey
16 Jun 2006, 11:04 PM
Your welcome, but not welcome.
on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey
16 Jun 2006, 1:22 PM
Too much repetition of words and phrases in this one. Makes the poem come off as monotonous.
Let me show you:
The last of the winds came today.
A final push.
Tomorrow weâll hear what theyâve left us.
It's message never closer.
Look to the east, you can almost feel it on your cheek and to the west it holds you
like a bed of fallen leaves.
Did you feel the cold?
Itâs always worse than you remember.
I would tell you I made it that way
but you wouldnât believe me.
Not without all the things I'll never say.
The last of the winds came today.
They have not yet gone.
It lingers like a sleep
thatâs not ready to surrender.
A scent left on your shoulder
by a heart so close to yours.
The last of the winds
takes a little of you with it.
Leaves you empty
and allows the possibility of fullness.
Let me show you:
The last of the winds came today.
A final push.
Tomorrow weâll hear what theyâve left us.
It's message never closer.
Look to the east, you can almost feel it on your cheek and to the west it holds you
like a bed of fallen leaves.
Did you feel the cold?
Itâs always worse than you remember.
I would tell you I made it that way
but you wouldnât believe me.
Not without all the things I'll never say.
The last of the winds came today.
They have not yet gone.
It lingers like a sleep
thatâs not ready to surrender.
A scent left on your shoulder
by a heart so close to yours.
The last of the winds
takes a little of you with it.
Leaves you empty
and allows the possibility of fullness.
replying on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey
16 Jun 2006, 1:02 PM
"Make it more poetic!"
You threw that one out just in case Zodiac might still be watching didn't you?
You threw that one out just in case Zodiac might still be watching didn't you?
replying on Blessings by amanda_dcosta
16 Jun 2006, 12:58 PM
Too bad it seems he'll never return. Maybe if we say his name 3 times like Beetlejuice...?
replying on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove
16 Jun 2006, 12:48 PM
Oh, I even backed these 2 comments up too.
The last two lines are a little hard to understand. Do you mean something like "or else I'll be one of those lost to history"?