on some deleted poem
15 Jun 2005, 2:46 PM
I don't get it. I guess I'll try reading it again. Sometimes I'm just dense. I think I missed a metaphor or something.
on Between the Edges by woodstock20000
15 Jun 2005, 2:49 PM
loving/hating -- wonderful/wrenching.
I tend to use this type of dissonance too much in what I write about love.
I tend to use this type of dissonance too much in what I write about love.
on some deleted poem
15 Jun 2005, 2:39 PM
in the first verse I feel confused by the possessive apostrophe on "mans'" then in the next line you write "mind" as if 'man' has a collective mind. The rest of your poem uses the word 'man' in a plural sense.
and -- I'm thinking you are a space alien since you find no sympathy in yourself for mankind (sociopath or space alien...you choose). So, good job for a space alien.
and -- I'm thinking you are a space alien since you find no sympathy in yourself for mankind (sociopath or space alien...you choose). So, good job for a space alien.
on Don't be gay by wCUNTw
16 Jun 2005, 10:54 AM
it rhymes, so it must be true.
on I AM WHO I AM by blackthoughtz1
16 Jun 2005, 10:59 AM
paradigm best explains you?
A pattern or model best explains you? huh.. strange. then you say you are outside of the box. cognitively dissonant. hmm.
A pattern or model best explains you? huh.. strange. then you say you are outside of the box. cognitively dissonant. hmm.
on Eulogy for a Poet by Dovina
16 Jun 2005, 11:24 AM
Frost in his belly
fire in his heart
fire in his heart
on When the muse calls. by darby pyn
16 Jun 2005, 11:58 AM
inhibitions instead of inabitions.. because inabitions is not a word. a great word instead of inabitions would be inanitions.
inanitions means exhaustion, as from lack of nourishment or vitality. This would make the next line about starving flow.
inanitions means exhaustion, as from lack of nourishment or vitality. This would make the next line about starving flow.
on some deleted poem
16 Jun 2005, 12:03 PM
eww
on some deleted poem
16 Jun 2005, 12:19 PM
I'm sad I had to read the comments to understand this... but I can see it now.. with the prodding from nentwined.
on Love by untamed_fierce
17 Jun 2005, 12:46 AM
good start.. where are the other stanzas?
I'll vote when you're done.
I'll vote when you're done.
on For the love of joey(revised) by mystic enoch
17 Jun 2005, 12:23 PM
"for the love of you" is just bad.
the genitive form of YOU is YOUR.
"for your love" is a song by a reggae band (King Konga) a Country Artist (Chris LeDoux), and a classic sixties rock song (yardbirds). I even think Stevie Wonder sang a song titled For your Love.
okay. bye.
the genitive form of YOU is YOUR.
"for your love" is a song by a reggae band (King Konga) a Country Artist (Chris LeDoux), and a classic sixties rock song (yardbirds). I even think Stevie Wonder sang a song titled For your Love.
okay. bye.
on missing pieces by mystic enoch
17 Jun 2005, 12:24 PM
not as good as the JOEY one.
on word splatter by nentwined
17 Jun 2005, 11:39 PM
graphic
on A limerick by smiffy84
17 Jun 2005, 11:43 PM
I think Joseph Smith was an idiot.
on Feed The War Machine by smiffy84
17 Jun 2005, 11:47 PM
most generals I've seen (excluding Stormin' Norman) are not fat.. they are quite trim, in fact.
We all have to die. Nobody makes anybody enlist in the armed services anymore. It's like saying "My life is not worth preserving" when you sign up.
We all have to die. Nobody makes anybody enlist in the armed services anymore. It's like saying "My life is not worth preserving" when you sign up.
on some deleted poem
18 Jun 2005, 4:51 PM
I don't hate this. mostly.
on Diary of sorrow.... by dantron
18 Jun 2005, 4:53 PM
you're spelling is awesome.
on This or That by sacred_poet_me
18 Jun 2005, 4:56 PM
Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.
on At The End by lil_evil_boi
18 Jun 2005, 5:00 PM
no