Weird. a smoke. a g and t.. and an enema is just what I wanted.. nah. -8-

cries

I didn't like the sexual content

"Where were the color ordinary" -- hard to say out loud.

I confess.

I like this. At first I wished you had changed the format so that I could see the rhyme...but nah.. I just like it. almost makes me think of a hard core Dr. Suess book in meter.

I haven't got the words.

I don't know. I like the word 'darkvoiced'

graphic

It's not your fault if I don't get it.

I don't know why "licked the iron mantlepiece" works for me...

oh. unrated.

Misery is a woman. Ha! nice.

seems deeply personal.
some stuff didn't leave any images in my head. It could be me; probably is me. Here they are anyway:

"Died daily from devils in playgrounds"
"Half read books became leaves."
"bastard of childhood"

Not really criticisms...just lines that I had to stop on and think about to no conclusion.

I disagreed with the general premise of your poem.

However, I did see the images in my head as I read it.

I like this poem.

I thought of cigarettes when I read this. Camel hard pack. I have no idea why.

raunchy

I self-define as a cactus that wants a hug.

Fine