on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
26 Jun 2005, 11:46 AM
The first 14 lines sound like my 10 year old,
spewing fourth awkward taunts -
the rest is great.
spewing fourth awkward taunts -
the rest is great.
on You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger
9 Mar 2006, 7:03 PM
Very clever bit of prose here - I like it a lot. Could use just a few less words. "Top-hat velvet" and "soft-shoe shine", "where time is a circle" (and others) read (and sound) so well. Good job young poet! Please keep writing.
on Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer
9 Mar 2006, 7:59 PM
I like this - most people won't get it - thinking it quite vulgar or invidious. This has a raw dark art to it that reads (and sounds) beautifully.
on Goldmunds Slut Fiasco. by SupremeDreamer
9 Mar 2006, 8:11 PM
Not sure about this as a whole - but sure of it's power by degrees. Pretty cool snack!
on Nude Falling Down Staircase by zodiac
12 Mar 2006, 8:54 AM
Spew
If you wallow in trivial shit - you'll always put fourth
trivial shit.
GROW UP!