poemranker ::20 most recent comments by matt door

Comments bymatt door, the 20 most recent. Include replies

on Valentine by zodiac 23 Mar 2006, 9:15 PM
yawn
on A Lover's Lament by woodstock20000 29 Mar 2006, 6:41 PM
I like the simplicity and regret, but the fluency and word choice could be revised.
on some deleted poem 28 Mar 2006, 7:26 PM
Wow - I said "whatever" after I read this as well.
Not your best by any means - but not truly bad. -7-
on 9/11 - The Jumpers by Caducus 30 Mar 2006, 8:30 PM
Your skills have'nt risen - that's for sure!"the jumpers jumped"? "twin towers fell"? Come on - be a tad more crafty than this? Too basic.
on Time Thief by Dovina 28 Mar 2006, 7:42 PM
Parts of this are fairly good - other parts - really suck quite frankly. Keep posting, because you have talent, this piece
just lacks it for the most part. Sorry.
on Squalid by Caducus 23 Mar 2006, 9:52 PM
Maybe just maybe,
what we seek is less words from rhyming vultures, who pick at the bones of poetry - in search of something they found years and sentences ago?
on The Beautiful Lover by Caducus 30 Mar 2006, 8:18 PM
I like this - last line could be better - still very good! "deceits" should be deceit's. -8-
on Ghosts of years (rhymey edit) by ecargo 30 Mar 2006, 8:53 PM
Good thoughts - yet the words fail this poem. Too many words are used - it stains your meaning with feckless hot air.
on Sarah, Freefalling (twee for AlChemy) by ecargo 29 Mar 2006, 6:31 PM
Seems tired - like it's been done before now? It is a good poem - just not striking - "white-faced hills" and "rasberry girl" seems to have been written before? Or is it just my feeble mind?
on SOMETIMES? by Garrett S Sexton 29 Mar 2006, 6:51 PM
Is this for some reason almost funny? Or just acutely sad? Garrett - this seems to be pure unadulterated shit.
Or is it just me?
on My First Hangover by mindsigns 28 Mar 2006, 7:33 PM
Did'nt know Nick-at-Night was holding a poetry contest.
This would win the 7th grade class by a hair.
on some deleted poem 28 Mar 2006, 8:11 PM
Caducus - I took the time to actualy read this one - you did well I guess(though I hate to admit).A tad too abstract with some grammar gaffes. "noone - devils - devil's"
on Sonnet by zodiac 23 Mar 2006, 9:35 PM
I like this - but it seems tired - almost easy - yet forced - like you're searching for something that's already there? Common "Zodiac" - same as you ever was -
just enough talent - way too much time!
on some deleted poem 23 Mar 2006, 9:38 PM
Yawn
on Boundaries by Dhanesh M Kumar 12 Mar 2006, 6:33 PM
Jubilant dolphin? Passionate bird? Giraffe's head?
Erase this whole thing and start over.Sorry so harsh - but this really needs work.
on i realize by http://robynhood 12 Mar 2006, 6:48 PM
Read this aloud before you post it next time - sounds quite improper - does it not? Thought and emotion are placed well - but grammar and meter is quite lacking.
on Crowded by INTRANSIT 12 Mar 2006, 6:26 PM
Common repetition?
on Nude Falling Down Staircase by zodiac 31 Aug 2006, 7:30 PM
so very tired - so lame - no sheets? try something more
personable - a tad more broad - you're too selfish.
on Valentine by zodiac 31 Aug 2006, 7:33 PM
Read like a fucking obituary - long and painful. Your ego harms your poetry - sorry.
on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer 31 Aug 2006, 7:42 PM
Did u mean plains or planes, or did you just not care - 'cause this was quite long and stale. Elementary son - sorry.Simple and "plain".