on Mind Over Madness by drnick
20 Jul 2006, 7:51 AM
This is about drugs, and being on them.
on The Lonesome Loser by Dovina
14 Jul 2006, 12:09 PM
Please stop writing about me.
on some deleted poem
5 Apr 2006, 10:11 AM
I like it.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2006, 12:22 PM
You should stick to ripping off real artists.
on My secret to life by amanda_dcosta
22 Jun 2006, 10:34 PM
Who is this Jesus fellow??? He sounds facinating/fictional. Will you pass this note to him for me?
Dear Jebus,
Do you like me?
YES []
NO []
MAYBE []
Thanks.
Heart,
Nick
Dear Jebus,
Do you like me?
YES []
NO []
MAYBE []
Thanks.
Heart,
Nick
on These Past Sixteen Months by amanda_dcosta
5 Apr 2006, 10:06 AM
I liked this up until the second-to-last stanza, and I don't think I need to explain why. I like the fourth stanza the best, very nice.
on Maybe I Wasnât Born on a Foolâs Day by Dovina
12 Apr 2006, 10:42 AM
Pretty good.
on Random Design by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Apr 2006, 10:56 AM
I agree with what has already been said, and I'd like to add that at the end of the 7th stanza, you should cut the last line: "Only it's not" as that is implied when you say "like a dream." I like the last stanza the most, very nice.
on College Bound by Miggy
12 Apr 2006, 10:40 AM
boring
on some deleted poem
6 Apr 2006, 12:59 PM
While System of a Down is better than Metallica, you should probably think of writing your own material rather than plagiarizing the hard work of others. And for what? So you look good to the people on this site? You must lead a very sad and pathetic existance. I'm giving you the number that best represents the asshole you are.
on Shy, quiet by Ranger
5 Apr 2006, 10:01 AM
Well, I didn't catch the club-theme going on here, but I still think this is a good poem. I like the third line. The last line is very good, I can relate to that. All that said, you've done much better than this.
on The Day After Next by cyan9
5 Apr 2006, 10:23 AM
I really like this. I'm not sure that many people know what black and white camera film melting is like, so perhaps you would consider a different analogy. I like the "jerked from frame to frame" and "like children crying and the screeching of worn brakes." Very good imagry.
on Pastoral Care (Psalm 23 revisited) by Dovina
5 Apr 2006, 10:33 AM
I like it, but...psalm? This makes me think of how I was growing up as a teenager, and the sequential maturing into my current relationship with them. The only thing is my mom never rubbed it in like this woman did.
on Inbetween Lovers/Blueprint by Ranger
6 Apr 2006, 12:55 PM
Yes!!! This is the good stuff, my friend. I embelishes how I feel so much that I want to read it to certain people and then tell them to "fuck off." There are so many good lines, I'll name some favorites: 3rd line, 2nd stanza...1st line, 3rd stanza...lines 7-8, 4th stanza...and of course the end line is golden. I wouldn't change a thing, I'm giving you a 9.5.
on The Unforgiven II by alvinb
31 Mar 2006, 10:54 AM
Of all the Metallica songs you chose to rip-off, you picked this one?! I'm giving you a zero, obviously, and kicking you square in the nuts(if you have them) if I ever see you. Next time go with something like "Seek & Destroy."
on Something More by drnick
11 Aug 2006, 8:17 AM
fuck, it should say "you need to lose.", not "you need to loose."
on Suicide Dream by Ranger
26 Jul 2006, 9:55 AM
I really love the image you've created with this one. So dark and eerie, which happens to be my favorite scene. I don't know how you do it, but you do it again and again. I'd like to read that short story if you ever do write it.
on Rushed into the blur by Miggy
26 Aug 2006, 8:58 AM
I'll give it to you that this is a step in the right direction as it is not a traditional subject matter. However, your lyrics are still boring and say nothing profound.