on Munnar -a must -see destination by Jessina
16 Sep 2011, 1:25 PM
I know Munnar... so I can connect with its landscape. but from just the description, it doesn't take me there poetically, although you may rhyme. While reading it I was looking for something that would make me say WOW as in 'yes, this is the poetry-inspiring MUNNAR'.... apart from the generalized description that every traveler to Munnar posts. I know you added some adjectives to describe it, but sometimes the reader wants more than a description. We want to find the poet in the poem.
replying on Jesus wept by amanda_dcosta
27 Apr 2011, 3:04 AM
True.
Also shows how human He was. He felt emotions that we feel, and loss that we fell..... or did he really feel 'loss' knowing that life would be restored to Lazarus that day?
Also shows how human He was. He felt emotions that we feel, and loss that we fell..... or did he really feel 'loss' knowing that life would be restored to Lazarus that day?
replying on Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta
27 Apr 2011, 2:58 AM
Thanks for the rating and comment, Dovina.
Initially when I wrote this poem and posted it at helium, I got a poor rating for it. I think many didn't quite get the terms used and so it must have sounded off (?) perhaps. After I added the glossary of terms, the poem really shot up on the charts, and so I was satisfied that it was a good write. Your rating of 8 is much appreciated. :)
Initially when I wrote this poem and posted it at helium, I got a poor rating for it. I think many didn't quite get the terms used and so it must have sounded off (?) perhaps. After I added the glossary of terms, the poem really shot up on the charts, and so I was satisfied that it was a good write. Your rating of 8 is much appreciated. :)
on Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta
22 Apr 2011, 2:13 PM
Glossary of music terms:
Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence
Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence
replying on Freedom by amanda_dcosta
13 Feb 2011, 12:04 AM
Thank you for your vote and critique. Much appreciated. :)
The phrases / words that you chose to mention were written specifically for each line. Each verse follows the imagery of 'being free' from some sort of bondage or clutch.
In the first verse it is - 'free from heavy chains',
2nd verse - to escape
3rd verse - spirit held tight in grip (can be interpreted in many ways)indicating a need to be free
4th verse - unlock door of cell / bell's ring of freedom
5th verse - breathe in freedom; free from suffocation of emotional or depressive struggles
6th verse - 'to roam' signifying being free
Every verse reflects the title and theme of the poem and hence these specific words were chosen. However, I will give it a second thought to what could be better than despair, although I do not find your suggestions fitting in with the theme. All the same, will think it over. Thanks for the review. :)
The phrases / words that you chose to mention were written specifically for each line. Each verse follows the imagery of 'being free' from some sort of bondage or clutch.
In the first verse it is - 'free from heavy chains',
2nd verse - to escape
3rd verse - spirit held tight in grip (can be interpreted in many ways)indicating a need to be free
4th verse - unlock door of cell / bell's ring of freedom
5th verse - breathe in freedom; free from suffocation of emotional or depressive struggles
6th verse - 'to roam' signifying being free
Every verse reflects the title and theme of the poem and hence these specific words were chosen. However, I will give it a second thought to what could be better than despair, although I do not find your suggestions fitting in with the theme. All the same, will think it over. Thanks for the review. :)
replying on Best friends by amanda_dcosta
26 Nov 2010, 11:04 AM
Yeah, something like that Dovina. Experiences do have a way of reflecting itself in what we write. Thanks for the vote.
on The still wheel by Caducus
19 Jul 2010, 10:57 PM
Nicely written. I could see where this was going and you have the imageery done well too; but I'd rather you lose some of the unnecessary words like.... 'so she knew he was', 'she had outlived them all' and instead just give a full impact imagery in phrase form. Losing some of those unnecessary words would make it more impressive than it already is.
on Poemranker is Back! by Dovina
19 Jul 2010, 10:39 PM
Yay indeed! :)
replying on My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta
9 Mar 2009, 10:34 PM
Blindpoetry / nentwined - :-) Thanks for the comments. valuable. Would like to point out though that this is what our thoughts are about most often. We try to sort things out, we wonder why somethings happen, especially when we cannot find a reasonable explanation. Its like - is it this , or is it that. It is not necessary to have come to an answer at that moment, but this verse is an expression of 'wondering'. Just the very act of thinking !
on harvest moon by Caducus
8 Mar 2009, 12:13 AM
Imagery is good, though I believe it picked up pace only by the second half.
I think I read this many times and fail to see how I didnt comment on it. Its lovely writing.
BTW - I tried mailing you a couple of times on your social network page and your mailing add, but it looks like you dont use them anymore. however , if you get this message, send me a test mail. Anyway, hows everything and what's happening with you.
BTW - I tried mailing you a couple of times on your social network page and your mailing add, but it looks like you dont use them anymore. however , if you get this message, send me a test mail. Anyway, hows everything and what's happening with you.
on Childhood Memories by Jessina
25 Oct 2008, 4:06 AM
Hi Jess, good to see you around. What's happening and how have you been ? Good to see your poem here.
on The Man Who Drooped by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
25 Jul 2008, 4:30 AM
A lovely read.
on Question by half.italian
25 Jul 2008, 4:25 AM
Interesting.
on What you wana hang out later? by T. Jonathron Remp
25 Jul 2008, 4:24 AM
Am left wondering what this 'what you' is about ...
Hi D. i remember cheering for you on your 200th poem, and here I see you've done another 100. Way to go girl. But what is this I read 'Amanda Dcosta has gone to heaven'? LOL. I was highly amused with that statement.
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Ok... guess its time for Amanda Dcosta to step down from heaven and return to our PR World. You guys have been missing me for long..... Hello everyone... good to see you all. Cheers to PR. I'm back !!!
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