replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
27 Feb 2006, 7:19 PM
Dovina, thanks for the insight. There's a lot to edit and correct in this piece. But since I've already posted it here, I'm just waiting for public opinion on how I should go about it. Your review helps.
replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
27 Feb 2006, 3:48 AM
Blue Magpie. Thanks! I'm not sure how close it is to being a prose poem. All the same I've tried.
replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
27 Feb 2006, 3:42 AM
Betty? Wow! I'm christened here? lol. By th way, who sang that song.... I forget now.
on Iron Sky by MacFrantic
26 Feb 2006, 11:17 AM
I'd say you've quite a few pieces better than this. In my opinion, this ain't very impressive. I wish I could pin point.
replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
26 Feb 2006, 11:12 AM
Just trying out a different style. Thanks for the review.
on Buried in the Booth (edit) by drnick
26 Feb 2006, 10:37 AM
I'd say that this was a good write. Sometimes a writer finds it hard to put into word what he has in mind, but I think you did a pretty good job at this. Like Dovina said, a bit of less description would make it better. Good work!
replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
26 Feb 2006, 10:25 AM
Sorry! Line 12 is supposed to read 'dressed like any other guy'.
replying on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
26 Feb 2006, 10:19 AM
Thanks Al. (Your name sounds better this way. It's sounds too hard (harsh) when in full.)....
I know what you are getting at. A lot of ideas came to mind when I wrote it, but then, should that stop me from writing what I originally meant to?
Atleast this might be some entertainment for a few, perhaps. So enjoy.
I know what you are getting at. A lot of ideas came to mind when I wrote it, but then, should that stop me from writing what I originally meant to?
Atleast this might be some entertainment for a few, perhaps. So enjoy.
on The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick
26 Feb 2006, 10:11 AM
Not bad!
on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta
26 Feb 2006, 4:37 AM
I have been trying a different style from my usual. It would be helpful to know what you feel about it.
I have had this in mind for a long time since Alchemy asked me to be more personal with the biblical characters I was writing about. Ref: some of my earliest poems.
I have had this in mind for a long time since Alchemy asked me to be more personal with the biblical characters I was writing about. Ref: some of my earliest poems.
on My Shattered Love by Silverjackel
26 Feb 2006, 3:58 AM
Seeing how negative you are in the end justifies why she has to be worse than a typhoon or a cyclone or a twister, what ever you'd call it. I would have liked a more positive ending, you might have got an -8- from me then. Saying that you prayed for her good, rather, would have it going in your favour strongly.
on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie
25 Feb 2006, 3:05 AM
Too long for me at the moment.... will have to come back for it in a fresher frame of mind.
on A young Manâs Demise by Dovina
15 Feb 2006, 9:35 PM
Who is the inspiration behind this poem?
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 8:12 PM
Pray a little more, buddy, and then you won't be too weak to hold onto faith. Come on, be a man, you can do it!
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 8:09 PM
Your a wise man Al, your a wise man!
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 6:56 PM
He might not have God ..... but rather, God has him. He has you too Alchemy. Watch out.
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 6:52 PM
:-)
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 6:49 PM
Mr. heathen, what's this about undeniable bias? You are the one who's supposed to rate this poem and not the others. Now you do hurt my finest sentiments ( if ever there was any!) ha ha.... suit yourself...... I'll be on the look out for your piece.
and yes, it was His 'plan' for you to get reall drunk, if you may say so.
and yes, it was His 'plan' for you to get reall drunk, if you may say so.
replying on To drnick by amanda_dcosta
15 Feb 2006, 10:07 AM
Thank you Dovina. I take this as an honour. Your normal vote on my pages is a -7-.
As for the stronger stuff, this is basically how I pray. Besides, I can't cure myself of some habits, how am I gonna cure someone else's. And 'curing' ain't my fancy. Being adventurous is mine.
As for the stronger stuff, this is basically how I pray. Besides, I can't cure myself of some habits, how am I gonna cure someone else's. And 'curing' ain't my fancy. Being adventurous is mine.
on Valentine 2 by zodiac
15 Feb 2006, 7:09 AM
Quite different from my usual preference,.... but I like it. Are these news clippings from some real event. I ain't much of a news person, must admit that.