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replying on Happy Charlene by Dovina 11 Jul 2005, 7:57 PM
interesting. I missed it. now reading it
back I don't know what I saw.
I still like it.
replying on Happy Charlene by Dovina 11 Jul 2005, 7:46 PM
What's it about.
since I got it wrong.
replying on Damned by darby pyn 11 Jul 2005, 7:04 PM
it can be. but being you are the person
who causes that finality. and not just
getting satisfaction by looking he needs to do
you can't have one without the other.
my opinion only.
on Happy Charlene by Dovina 11 Jul 2005, 3:53 PM
nice positive emotions.
a good read.
replying on Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn 11 Jul 2005, 3:41 PM
sorry it confused you.
it was not my intention to be vague.
replying on Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn 11 Jul 2005, 3:39 PM
OK.
discarded plankton. microscopic food for fish.
discarded to emphasize the lack of care for.
head held down in a permanent slouch.
it suggest the ambiguous response to the question asked.
thanks for the questions.
hope it explains what I meant.
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina 8 Jul 2005, 11:18 AM
I can totally see that.
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina 8 Jul 2005, 11:05 AM

it feels political.
it’s vague. I like vague shit I’m the
king of vagueness. the last word reprehensible.
it feel like. what we don’t know wont hurt us
but it’s bad. like the means justify the ends.
replying on Almost Persuaded by Dovina 8 Jul 2005, 10:21 AM

I knew as soon as I clicked. that sentence was wrong.
I know you’re deeper then that.
and I’m not consumed with sex..
I like it. but not consumed.
replying on The choices we make by darby pyn 7 Jul 2005, 10:14 PM
You're right about the rhyme dictating the poem.
definitely something to ponder on.
replying on What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn 7 Jul 2005, 8:16 PM
good point.
on Almost Persuaded by Dovina 7 Jul 2005, 3:46 PM
the title seems to imply it's about
someone persuading another into having sex.
it's ok.... but a little mechanical.
it needs more emotion.
just my opinion.
replying on Damned by darby pyn 7 Jul 2005, 3:17 PM
BWC I respect your writing. and you always seem sincere
with your questions so I'll try to explain.
the poem itself is about the movie "American psycho".
I do poems about movies alot. it's just something I
like to do."I try to hide but the cacophony in my head
scrapes the calcium from my bones and I
wilt". this means this person is going crazy.
the voices in his head so on and so on are wearing on
him he tries to hide by doing normal things
tries hobbies etc. but he's loosing the fight
his compulsion to kill is taking over. he is wilting
from strengh to fight these urges to become a killer.
replying on Damned by darby pyn 7 Jul 2005, 3:04 PM
thank you dovina.
replying on The taste of something new. by darby pyn 5 Jul 2005, 8:56 PM
it's just used as a metaphor. I could have said glass.
I meant it closer to your second analogy.
replying on The taste of something new. by darby pyn 5 Jul 2005, 10:15 AM
could you explain the other way dovina.
thanks.
replying on The taste of something new. by darby pyn 4 Jul 2005, 2:41 PM

I use the word steep to describe the severity
of the disconnection.

and vanity I always thought as being an obvious
characteristic.
everyone’s interpretation is different but
I thank you for your opinion.
on Try Thinking Too by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 2 Jul 2005, 12:44 AM
very vivid.
well done. 8
on My Little Africa (edit) by Nuit 2 Jul 2005, 12:07 AM
I enjoyed this.
well done.
replying on What's my favorite scar. by darby pyn 1 Jul 2005, 11:02 PM
Thank you Nuit.