The way I meant “inoculate the soars with rhetorical cement”
is this is a poem about a man at a young age who hated what he saw.
the government. his dad a poor man sent to war lost a limb
and gets spit at on return, say the church who beats him
and in his eyes full of hypocrisy. so say you want to memorize
a number, 856, 856 , 856. you repeat it over and over.
as a child he is saying “I will never be like that”
over and over. and in that case which I meant it
the phrase works.

thanks for your insight.

you are so right. it was late when I wrote this.

I don’t know what I was thinking.

I give myself a zero.. wow.

Thank you for your comments and insight as always.
the suggestions made will be carefully thought upon.
I am not so stubborn or vane to think their is no room
for improvement.

Harsh. but at least you expressed your opinion.
on second thought. if he deserves a zero I’ll
gladly give him one. but not out of spite.
if he want’s to give “0’s” and giggle behind
his screen. I could care less.

Agreed.

My friend said the same thing.
thanks bankrupt.
I'll fix it.

The line “ let me be flattery for my plagiarism” comes from the
phrase “ Imitation is the sincerest form of flattery”.
what I mean is I take all the beauty the person I admire has
and when I feel bad I think of her and I feel better.
thank you for your suggestions.
darby.

I know my writing seems vague and without foundation
but the subject of love is so overused with the same
old cliché in most poems on about it I tend to
be more abstract and less generic with my metaphors.
each person has their own interpretation and that’s
fine. I understand what I write. if others don’t
that’s OK. I hope their are scenes, verses that catch your
eye but dissecting it to pieces for everyone’s approval
and making it more tangible for mass opinion is bullshit.
I like your writing and appreciate all critcism.
constructive or not. I can take it. : )
I liked " unclean" allot.

the original line was " necessary". I have problems with
it also. thank you for your input.

Thank you dovina for your insight.

I decided on inhibition. it just seemed to flow better
to my ear. I appreciate the spell check.
thanks again.

Thank you bankrupt. I will fix it and use your suggestion.

it's funny because it's true..

Thank you. I wrote this without pause. when reading it back “ Labor”
seemed the proper title. it was not conceived with any obvious topic
but the pain and resolution of pregnancy seemed to manifest at the
conclusion as the interpretation of this Dr Suess nightmare.