on Untitled by midnight
16 Jul 2002, 10:13 PM
This is as didactic as I.
on Dragon's Dream by HolyKnightOfFaith
16 Jul 2002, 10:10 PM
Good god you know they don't exist right?? 7 for having the decency to not call it a haiku.
on life by -=??lilaznjen??=-
16 Jul 2002, 9:59 PM
Are you anusless or something?
on AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
10 Jul 2002, 9:30 PM
Dude you see Crank Yankers last night? I'm not surprised.
The irony of this poem is the graphic rigidity of its format. Perhaps you can look into that quality of the poem - the idea that the poetry is in itself a restriction from which you are unable, as a poet, to be free from. And I think the selective capitalization is really a small fish to be frying, I'd focus on the big idea a bit more.
on Angelic Triumvirate by Sterling5583
10 Jul 2002, 9:20 PM
This is so self-centered it bothers me. It actually seems quite sincere. So it's really good in that sense. I can't fault the preachyness, as much as I'd like to. Although I didn't enjoy this poem, it's pretty good.
on Quiet by kissmeufool58
10 Jul 2002, 9:18 PM
People from other cities used to drive for miles just for a taste of our ATL style
on How my head feels by Adriaan
10 Jul 2002, 9:17 PM
Nobody cares about your brain. I can't relate to this feeling personally. Thus, shit.
on Drinking Gravel by unknown
10 Jul 2002, 6:43 PM
I have three words for you: smoke dope
on Mrs. Robinson by roses are read
10 Jul 2002, 6:42 PM
I'd imagine both of those colors are the same pigment: pthalocyanine. Aren't I interesting? Wait wait don't ignore me! Why are you drowning me out?!?
on pain of love: by Sapphire
10 Jul 2002, 2:54 PM
The door is open, start walking Ms. Streisand.
on Promises by blueiris1261
10 Jul 2002, 2:52 PM
slurrrpblbl
on mental collides by nentwined
10 Jul 2002, 2:51 PM
Wow looks like I've influenced you quite a bit. Good work. This poem is great, I liked it a lot. It demonstrates and illustrates a feeling which can't be demonstrated directly, the sort of hazyness that is paired with thoughts of this nature. I would like it if it was a bit clearer - the "not yet" carries some weight but not quite enough. On the other had, the "not yet" is good since it doesn't bring any other entities into play, it simply marks one's place in time. I'd have investigated something more externally verbal, like "wait for it", that is, if I wrote this sort of poetry.
on Summertime by KatieKaBoom
10 Jul 2002, 2:45 PM
good point, somewhat unique good job etc.
on a prayer for grief by mitchski
10 Jul 2002, 2:44 PM
How come you never write poetry about being in love and getting laid?
on Holly by wlshepherd
10 Jul 2002, 2:43 PM
Good work LET'S PARTY
on Conversation Unspoken by JuddNelson
10 Jul 2002, 2:42 PM
Wait wait wait here's my immitation of Martin Lawrence: "It is clear you have *women problems*"
on Farewell Song by jaalko
10 Jul 2002, 2:41 PM
*slobbering noises for six hourse in the room nextdoor while you try to sleep*