poemranker ::20 most recent comments by INTRANSIT (1661-1680)

Comments byINTRANSIT, 1661–1680 back. Include replies

on Nighttime Conversation by unknown 27 Sep 2002, 4:26 AM
Got the point but it felt "flat"
on Just For Today by apples_tim 27 Sep 2002, 4:22 AM
Simply put. I can dig it.9
on City Streets by greym0on 27 Sep 2002, 4:35 AM
More color. Has a "New Yorky" feeling to it. You're in the right place. Welcome.
on Sadness by greym0on 27 Sep 2002, 4:39 AM
Again, needs color (metaphores). Don't say "pain". Try "steamrolled by the pain". Things like that.
on American Poem by ASTRO-GLIDE 26 Sep 2002, 9:47 AM
GLIDE ON BROTHER!!!!!!!
on some deleted poem 26 Sep 2002, 9:55 AM
YES! YES! YES! LIFE IN DEATH! SPIRITS NEVER DIE!
on RunOnSentence by harrytuttle 27 Sep 2002, 4:01 AM
I was going to agree with GW but then I pictured the horse and I couldn't think of anything better.A horse doesn't "jet", that would be gross. I like it as is.9
on some deleted poem 26 Sep 2002, 1:13 PM
If that were true, you wouldn't be here. Take heart,but go deeper.
on some deleted poem 26 Sep 2002, 1:16 PM
Ok, What the hell is wrong with you? Do you lose women like I lose my car keys and wallet or what? Thats two in one day!7
on that time my friend slipped me a speedball by unknown 26 Sep 2002, 1:21 PM
Is your friend polish? Hilarious!9
Any thing that makes me laugh gets high marks. Ishould try "medicating".
on Deaf by sav876 26 Sep 2002, 1:24 PM
Hope you're not really deaf. Last line hit full throttle.Liked it!9
on Transfixed (#2) by Christof 27 Sep 2002, 4:08 AM
Since I've been on this site I've gotten better at studying others' work.This is really good. ditto.
on some deleted poem 27 Sep 2002, 4:13 AM
"Death, and her kind." Boy ain't that the truth! Maybe just a dash of color to s-2?
on West Sands, late afternoon in winter by Nicholas Jones 27 Sep 2002, 4:17 AM
If more people would "jump in after themselves",they'd be a lot happier. Bravo.
on Up The Road Aways by harrytuttle 27 Sep 2002, 4:28 AM
I yearn for simpler times too. Thanks for reminding me where my watch is.
on Skin by greym0on 27 Sep 2002, 4:30 AM
Not bad,not bad. More drama.
on Conversations with a Clock II by morffrom 26 Sep 2002, 9:45 AM
What would happen if you changed the last line to "trick"? Too fun!
Glad not every one is so serious.
on A Time for More War by dougsoderstrom 26 Sep 2002, 12:51 PM
DO YOU MIND?!!!!! I'm trying to enjoy my last hunnert or so minutes before I have to leave.....
on some deleted poem 26 Sep 2002, 9:31 AM
THAT'S gonna lead to trouble. Why do women need men when they have cell phones?
on #16 by mikejedw 26 Sep 2002, 9:41 AM
I like it? What the hell did NJ say? OH, I got it.