replying on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>
30 Jul 2003, 6:26 AM
busted. cool custom job though. did you see this? or hear it in the news.
replying on Too obvious by INTRANSIT
30 Jul 2003, 6:20 AM
Yes, it's also the plague of Wile E. Coyote too.
replying on Too obvious by INTRANSIT
30 Jul 2003, 6:18 AM
like I'm really taking this one seriously. Dar... Pardon me. Mr Gayness should have done it. But white is not his gig. Dig?
on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>
30 Jul 2003, 6:08 AM
Did you tamper with the rhyme scheme? I know of two types of sonnetts and this doesn't fit either.
replying on Too obvious by INTRANSIT
30 Jul 2003, 6:04 AM
I just couldn't resist when no one else had done it. maybe I should try harder. lol
on Seeing Clearly in the Dark by Jimbo
30 Jul 2003, 5:55 AM
The bad news: S-3 I don't like. S-1 curdling sky/clear sky. keep the curdling. overall, a bit too much. overdone.
The good news: You are tucked under a swans wing. paddle gently. listen to her rhythm. she will share her feathers. best of luck.
The good news: You are tucked under a swans wing. paddle gently. listen to her rhythm. she will share her feathers. best of luck.
on Beauty within by geewhiz1962
30 Jul 2003, 5:44 AM
It may be pimply around the edges, it's almost spot on in rythm and has a mature message. there's potential here.
on DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos
30 Jul 2003, 5:42 AM
lol
on The Longest Wait (Revised) by Caducus
30 Jul 2003, 5:39 AM
Um, Caducus? You feelin' okay man? The last few poems have a down beat to them.
replying on After seven days in the sun by <~>
29 Jul 2003, 6:40 AM
LOL that's it! we're boxin' on this disney thing. Thanks for the pick-me-up. I'll be laughing at this all day.
replying on After seven days in the sun by <~>
29 Jul 2003, 6:28 AM
I meant poetically. Though I have gained so much ground due to the 'ranker and all involved. But,I think, it may not be me. ya know?
on After seven days in the sun by <~>
29 Jul 2003, 6:18 AM
I'm somewhere between lost and found at the corner of walk and don't walk.
on Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik
29 Jul 2003, 6:16 AM
You and that other chick have already conquered the day.
It's only 8 a.m.
It's only 8 a.m.
on Colgate & Paper towels by Bachus
27 Jul 2003, 9:57 AM
Bangin' on the belt.
on Departing Suburbia by Caducus
27 Jul 2003, 9:48 AM
Sorry, I was a little un-sober during my last comment. Not always a good thing. I particularly liked the just above freezing temp. Choosing to keep things "fluid". If only punching grandfather clocks would do the trick, eh?
on Departing Suburbia by Caducus
26 Jul 2003, 5:52 PM
But hey, if you've got six pack abs, you're good to go right? right? Fine job pardno. Good to see you're still pluggin'