on some deleted poem
16 Jun 2005, 7:20 PM
My vote is that you meant shrubs (plants) not scrubs (Surgical garb). Perhaps, I just don't get it. Is this another Neverland ranch poem? -9-
on Students by Blue Magpie
16 Jun 2005, 7:37 PM
I hear children's voices reading lines 12 through 14. I would hope that there are teachers in this country who might listen to their students as well as you seem to listen to yours. I admit that lines 7 through 11 are a bit off putting in that the images have already been overused in the daily media. But all in all, it seems to be an honest effort.
on White Stork by Blue Magpie
19 Jun 2005, 10:30 AM
Good form.
on The And women by INTRANSIT
19 Jun 2005, 10:37 AM
Yeah, you're right. Those pumpkin shells don't keep them very well.
on word splatter by nentwined
19 Jun 2005, 10:43 AM
So many nights just like the one described make me resonate with this poem. Now I have to shower with my flat screen monitor. A bit of William Carlos Williams or Carlos William Carlos in this one.
on A limerick by smiffy84
19 Jun 2005, 10:52 AM
When I heard this (let's see. I was twelve), It ended with the word "brother." Incest is always best in limerick form.
on The Worst Poem Ever Created (edited) by drnick
28 Jul 2005, 7:11 PM
If the poem had ended at the word orgasm it would be a ten. The :) and comment suck the joyous insanity out of this poem.-6- for getting it half right.
on Suicide by jessicazee
28 Jul 2005, 7:17 PM
Girl, you got poem bearing lips.
on a love not meant to be by nentwined
28 Jul 2005, 7:22 PM
We all have a crack in our base but we keep on trying. As another poet on this site said earlier, "Why have the choice if we never choose?" Keep sticking your hand into the clay, Netwined. You'll get there someday.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 11:33 AM
This is so depressing... I love it.
on The Ship by Tainted Butterfly
11 Sep 2005, 11:41 AM
Lose the fourth stanza and it would rock. By the third everyone reading this know it's about you. You pull it off at the end by making it about Everywoman/child. -7- for now.
on some deleted poem
6 Oct 2005, 10:08 PM
I wish I could edit without going to the top of the most recent list.
on some deleted poem
4 Oct 2005, 9:25 AM
I couldn't agree more. This site is a mini poetic autobiography. Right now life is not at its best. Maybe later life will start getting better. Maybe only the poems will. thanks for your input.
on Apocalypse has come to end by Prince of Void
25 Dec 2005, 1:39 PM
"Screams of mans in end of their times" says it all.
on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf
25 Dec 2005, 1:42 PM
"He taught she is ugly, unworthy, dumb.
Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad
Now her feelings of worth are numb." sad
on Never Let Go Again by TLRufener
25 Dec 2005, 1:46 PM
"When I see you next
I will take you into my arms
And never let go again" kidnap?
I will take you into my arms
And never let go again" kidnap?