on Enlightenment by Dovina
20 Jan 2005, 8:02 AM
Way to go, Dovina. The only queen America bows to these days is George Michaels. Kick the Brits ass.
on some deleted poem
16 Jan 2005, 10:24 AM
P.K. Dick lives!
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2005, 8:57 AM
I think you misspelled "pppp9ooooi88i77uuu'-'yuy677777777775666 666 666 666 666. -10-
on some deleted poem
24 Jan 2005, 5:13 AM
With all its tension, there is something very stable about the image of a turnbuckle. There's a balance and also an importance to the job that is done by the turnbuckle as it holds together two things desperate to fly apart. My poem on the same subject is about a different tool-- the Rack.
I love a poem about a babe with a good rack.
I love a poem about a babe with a good rack.
on some deleted poem
24 Jan 2005, 5:19 AM
Especially as the poems get older.
on Reasons by dancin_n_da_moonlite
24 Jan 2005, 5:21 AM
Sounds like it could be a Green Day song.
on Feudal Conflict by Dovina
24 Jan 2005, 4:29 PM
Gee Dovina, around L.A. the queens slay as they lay with their own holey men.
on Memphis Skyline by wilco
25 Jan 2005, 7:48 PM
Good lyric. The line "sitting on the banks" makes me wonder if it should be "sitting on the bank." I don't know if Memphis has several rivers with banks upon which to sit or a river with one bank and another on the other side. Still, I like it-9-.
on "I" became "We" by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*.
26 Jan 2005, 7:38 AM
Never give up.
God's got sumpthang, etc. -8-
God's got sumpthang, etc. -8-
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows:
"but Iâm better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
"but Iâm better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
on Pillow Talk by horus8
16 Feb 2005, 12:18 AM
May I count to 100 by -10-'s?
on The Man I Love by Dovina
16 Feb 2005, 12:10 AM
This poem is sweeter than Splenda.-10-
on Insanity by Lifeboatman
16 Feb 2005, 12:14 AM
As a man trapped in a woman's body, I must confess that you are right. -10-
on Piercings by PsydewaysTears
16 Feb 2005, 12:27 AM
I liked the concept and the twist at the end.
Some rhymes could have been a bit "weirder" in keeping with the subject, for example:
Some people pierce "down under"
below the waist; above the knees.
Wait a minute! Does that make it sound like an Australian piercing?
Your poem works for me. -9-
Some rhymes could have been a bit "weirder" in keeping with the subject, for example:
Some people pierce "down under"
below the waist; above the knees.
Wait a minute! Does that make it sound like an Australian piercing?
Your poem works for me. -9-
on Summing Up by Dovina
20 Feb 2005, 10:05 PM
Nicely put.
on Advertising says: by Dovina
2 Mar 2005, 8:44 AM
You are at your best when you do the math. The feeling I get from this poem is âEnnui and TV.â
I'd give it a ten except that because of the last line I did a google seach and found no "Church of LintyWeenis." I guess it must be an Amish sect(No computers allowed)?