on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2003, 3:18 PM
Beautiful and sanguine 9
on Birdcalls by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2003, 3:26 PM
Loved the way you wrapped up S1 with the last 4 lines, speaks volumes about family values, appreciation of nature over social disdain.
Just one of those poems i want to read as i get something from it.
The last one of your poems was partly responsible for my poem 'Brighton Beach' i would appreciate your views on it good or bad.....Please.
Just one of those poems i want to read as i get something from it.
The last one of your poems was partly responsible for my poem 'Brighton Beach' i would appreciate your views on it good or bad.....Please.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2003, 8:55 AM
Kite-flyers running the rim of a hillside
Love it !
Love it !
on Love doggerel by thavimatola
29 Sep 2003, 9:28 AM
Don't get it? help !
on Making Bread by Shardik
9 Oct 2003, 8:54 AM
Yep ! sure floured my apron
on body image by http://mulberryfairy
29 Sep 2003, 9:27 AM
Gotta tell you sweetie - love your work 9.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2003, 9:32 AM
Oh the end, the end ahhhhhh ! A belly laugh.
I have to say I enjoyed this poem, very rich full of detail, scene set with splendour and written with panache. From intro to end this has class -10-
Fucking A
I have to say I enjoyed this poem, very rich full of detail, scene set with splendour and written with panache. From intro to end this has class -10-
Fucking A
on Behind the veil by INTRANSIT
1 Oct 2003, 1:12 AM
add another 4 lines with the same rhyme as the first 2 , end it with 2 non rhyme lines and you have thee a sonnet !
As a poem - deluxe - the last line kind of crackles not explodes apart from that a dine squirt of ink 8
As a poem - deluxe - the last line kind of crackles not explodes apart from that a dine squirt of ink 8
on Behind the veil by INTRANSIT
1 Oct 2003, 1:12 AM
fine squirt of ink even
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2003, 8:31 AM
Epic, romantic, a nuance fest.
on Ecohippie by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
9 Oct 2003, 8:32 AM
i so cracked up at the last 2 lines of S4.
very modest but my mark sir is not - 8
very modest but my mark sir is not - 8
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2003, 8:34 AM
i'm knackered but some bits i likey and some bits i had to pinch myself to check i was in the same poem/prose/ thingy.
Meagan sounds cute.
Meagan sounds cute.
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2003, 8:41 AM
I don't think it deserves the crap mark of 4. I can see you've give it a shot, maybe you mean dank and not dang? think you need to edit.
Naughty rabbit. 6
Naughty rabbit. 6
on Erect Tongue of Excite by LuckyJoe
9 Oct 2003, 8:48 AM
the poem bites but the title sucks like a long distance lover 6
on Erect Tongue of Excite by LuckyJoe
9 Oct 2003, 8:48 AM
7 even
on the meeting by richa
9 Oct 2003, 8:50 AM
De Ja vous but i like it
on some deleted poem
9 Oct 2003, 8:51 AM
What i don't understand i have felt and this cryptic comment you will find i like it -8
on NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8
10 Oct 2003, 9:02 AM
In parts a similar vein to Tintagiles stuff - that can't be bad.
Lose the line about the blue collar sleeps as only we who know you know that.
Ahh unless of course your pajamas have blue lapelles - but you strike me as going 'commando' when u sleep.
Just don't ask me why i think these disturbing thoughts.
Lose the line about the blue collar sleeps as only we who know you know that.
Ahh unless of course your pajamas have blue lapelles - but you strike me as going 'commando' when u sleep.
Just don't ask me why i think these disturbing thoughts.
on sex sex sex! by FreeFormFixation
10 Oct 2003, 9:04 AM
if you add the word no between each of the words in the title you would have written a short poem about my life.
on some deleted poem
10 Oct 2003, 9:17 AM
Makes me want to hug a tree and light incense - very VERY nice Sire ! 9