on the midget of humiliation by Bill Z Bub
17 Feb 2003, 12:10 PM
I like the edit except for st. 6. I gave you a ten last time and stanza 3 more than equals that.
on Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik
15 Feb 2003, 5:03 PM
There are some brilliant images in here, not all of them go together, but sod it, who cares? Good stuff. 9
on The Gentleman by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
17 Feb 2003, 12:05 PM
Superb(e)!
on she said by Bill Z Bub
17 Feb 2003, 12:12 PM
Wonderful. 8
on Gloria's Falling Sun by OneFingerAnswer
16 Feb 2003, 6:56 AM
Neat work, and you've got possibly the best username on this site!
on some deleted poem
16 Feb 2003, 7:13 AM
God might be dead, but so is Neitzsche. Hell yeah.
on Sharks For Libido by scitz
16 Feb 2003, 7:15 AM
Too long to be a haiku but the images are good.
on Parting the Curtains by Blue Magpie
16 Feb 2003, 12:12 AM
I like the poem-although perhaps you could try to structure it 4,3,2,1-put a line in after "Loneliness..." and have "And I..." on its own at the end.
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
Or maybe not. Nice poem anyway
on Prelude to a Legend by ThoughtfulSoul
16 Feb 2003, 12:34 AM
There are some great lines in here, but too much unnecessary description of feeling (as god'swife says). I can see that you'll make a good writer or poet if you try. This deserves a 7, ideas and images are there, they just need to be selected and emphasised more (yeah, I know, emotion's a bastard to get down onto paper, I can't do it very well. Actually I can't write poetry very well. Oh well.)
on The Errant Knight by Thyme
13 Feb 2003, 12:46 PM
Very nice indeed! 9
on Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof
10 Feb 2003, 12:49 PM
Mr. Christof, this is one of the finest works of poetry that I've ever seen...you, sir, are a genius. May I ask as to whose poems you draw inspiration from? This is the template for the poems that I would love to write but don't have the ability-pleeeease let me know how you learnt to write like this! 10
on Of Bobjims (An actual poem this time!?!) by Bobjim
10 Feb 2003, 12:42 PM
Ahhhh, that inventiveness all the way from -
I wish you the best of luck in the future-my wish is the only hope you've got!
Ahahahahaha. Quite.
I wish you the best of luck in the future-my wish is the only hope you've got!
Ahahahahaha. Quite.
on some deleted poem
5 Feb 2003, 12:33 PM
Yes, as with the others I love this...the repetition of 'This night' made it feel to me as though it were being sung. I saw one of your other recent poems before I logged in which had rhyme, I've not seen your rhyming skills before, I'd better check it out.
Another nine for you, ma'am.
By the way, would it be impertinant of me to ask you to check out my latest works and tell me what you think? Especially the latest one. No-one's really told me if it's any good or not. Ta.
Another nine for you, ma'am.
By the way, would it be impertinant of me to ask you to check out my latest works and tell me what you think? Especially the latest one. No-one's really told me if it's any good or not. Ta.
on Mississipi Murder by scitz
5 Feb 2003, 12:43 PM
Nice.
A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
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A children's scream should be either a child's scream or children's scream...other than that, yeah.
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on The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted by OneFingerAnswer
5 Feb 2003, 12:28 PM
Wonderful, this rocks.
on Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer
5 Feb 2003, 12:34 PM
Nice proverb aside from the syllables.
on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos
15 Feb 2003, 4:49 PM
Nice
on immaculate perception by w~* ATHENA *~w
5 Feb 2003, 12:40 PM
Do you listen to Black Sabbath, Athena?
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
"In the daylight/runs darkness/on the verge of night a fear is born/sweeter than the dream" etc. Good song
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