Re: Peeping Sun by dreamsdiefirst	22-Feb-04/4:34 AM
silk purse corset hints of my covered self's inner nudity
Re: The Sipping of the Light by DeadtotheWorld	22-Feb-04/4:59 AM
What do the dreadful curtains symbolise, and are they dreadful because the match the sofa?
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Feb-04/5:02 AM
Shame it could not end with a one legged cow falling from the sky. Nevertheless the wordplay is very good. Off center/ cantor , in the heart in his heart, stilt shod circus clowns. Reads very well too.
Re: The Commanding Disobedince of Words by daggatolar	22-Feb-04/5:10 AM
instrument of sin? coyly CLS
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Feb-04/5:12 AM
'let me grow to satisfy your will/ take this swelling innocence'. Are you crystal lane swift in disguise?!
Re: Troubled Mind by DarkThirteens	22-Feb-04/5:18 AM
This is perfectly alright.
Re: The Niche by Fear of Garbage	23-Feb-04/1:23 PM
I think the comparison between woodwork and nightmare needs to be more elaborate. If it works it would be ace, but at the moment I am not getting it.
Re: Jonquils, daffydils by fevriere	24-Feb-04/8:28 AM
What white temple, if you are to use paris, I would suggest make some reference other than it is paris. Other than that cute, like knocking themselves dizzy
Re: Thoughts in a cloud above the Catskills by Enkidu	24-Feb-04/8:45 AM
OK I quite like triple rhyme, just a few things dont track. You are crying... why do you jest. Blackened ivory -- ivory is a cream colour, why would you blacken it, especially for use as braille. The final verse.
Re: Whore Of Nazareth by Mona Lisa	24-Feb-04/2:08 PM
Seen a lot of this before, may have been you or a caducus poem. The first line is pretty ace though.
Re: Glass Flowers by Bachus	24-Feb-04/2:11 PM
Not sure I understand convicted in the first line. Or the question mark. Reads well enough though.
Re: Damn Georgia Power by BrandonW	24-Feb-04/2:13 PM
can nothing but a brownout stop this flowing?
regarding some deleted poem...	24-Feb-04/2:15 PM
Like the anthropomorphism going on here, and the turn of phrase. 'the roosters made ready' 'ocean... took inventory'
Re: the wind's last crescendo by fair12	24-Feb-04/2:19 PM
Has a nice poetic feel, which is not always such a bad thing. Pleasant, and has a finished feel to it.
Re: A Natural Witch by Lenore	24-Feb-04/2:21 PM
Personally I would prefer the witch to be a character. Then you can bring out these features in a more scholarly and less serially way.
Re: Everyone's choosing sides by zodiac	24-Feb-04/2:25 PM
A nice rush-like quality to this. And a good combination of image and narrative. Not sure about sharp smelling as memory. Do you really mean that memory is sharp smelling? Also wet leaves do not really burn.
Re: Quest! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	24-Feb-04/2:27 PM
If you are not a child then you are an idiot -8-
Re: Choices in the Road by Pervy Elf	26-Feb-04/7:49 AM
To express this sentiment should only take two sentences max.
Re: Homecoming by somemorepoetry	26-Feb-04/7:50 AM
your very best
Re: Red by AskittlesK	26-Feb-04/9:55 AM
In hell you will be made to face yourself. How you have made light of self-mutilation.