on the small drop by richa
25 Jan 2004, 5:34 AM
a reworking of the loved child :
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
on World policy by penguin fiend
25 Jan 2004, 5:35 AM
Give your computer a rhyming dictionary and you are redundant with this poem.
on Just Passing Through by southernboy71
26 Jan 2004, 10:42 AM
lines three and four are quite good, has a nice laidback feel
on I Go On by drumrgirl30
26 Jan 2004, 10:45 AM
a bit cliched, I quite like the way you've stopped the poem dead at the end.
on some deleted poem
26 Jan 2004, 10:51 AM
verse two and three I like, especially three, an interesting (almost) irony.
on The Ballade of Hollis Browne by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
26 Jan 2004, 2:31 PM
All the mathematics and crude jokes in the world will never make you bob dylan.
I suggest you take your place in the commoners roome!!!
I suggest you take your place in the commoners roome!!!
on Come off with me Carly back into the city by zodiac
29 Jan 2004, 8:31 AM
this poem really benefits from the introduction. To me the superstition, almost delusion contrasts really well with the sadness.
on some deleted poem
29 Jan 2004, 10:18 AM
not sure the couplets work for this poem, especially when they break between verse two and three.
on some deleted poem
30 Jan 2004, 3:26 PM
100% with goad on this one, sadism is not about hate.
When you make a simple mistake like this it annoys the reader.
When you make a simple mistake like this it annoys the reader.
on some deleted poem
30 Jan 2004, 3:40 PM
Same as everyone else really -- tell me more about this crime, just don't leave it abstract or I will start to believe it does not exist (even in the imagination).
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2004, 12:39 PM
Best bit about this is 'wanted to do the chick right'.
That by finishing the poeme you had something more meaningful.
(if you meant do right by her).
That by finishing the poeme you had something more meaningful.
(if you meant do right by her).
on Tales From The Outhouse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
2 Feb 2004, 10:01 AM
Crap -0-
on Friends come and go, but sisters lasts forever. by devina
2 Feb 2004, 10:22 AM
'I can´t explain all of this' no but you could at least try to!
on Nina Simone (part one) by zodiac
2 Feb 2004, 10:24 AM
Cool, especially the ending.
on some deleted poem
2 Feb 2004, 10:31 AM
Like the first verse better, very melodramatic/classic.
(when I finally realised brutal and futile rhyme in american)
(when I finally realised brutal and futile rhyme in american)
on some deleted poem
2 Feb 2004, 1:26 PM
Sometimes you remind me of chef from southpark.
You start with the words of love and then its all limbs entwining and stroking.
You start with the words of love and then its all limbs entwining and stroking.
on Necromancers Song (Incubus Guitar & Buddhist Drums) by SupremeDreamer
5 Feb 2004, 8:44 AM
well written, reads smoothly
on Soft Beak; Hard lotion by Bachus
5 Feb 2004, 8:48 AM
Plenty of stuff to grab the attention.
I would say however that many defenceless animals are very ugly and make unpleasant sounds, why weren't they mentioned?
I would say however that many defenceless animals are very ugly and make unpleasant sounds, why weren't they mentioned?
Good stuff, plentiful