Comments byhorus8, 2101–2120 back. Include replies

on some deleted poem 30 Nov 2002, 2:28 PM
ah ha! that was just what i needed.wasn't it on this weekend...did you just get done watching it? 10.
on some deleted poem 1 Dec 2002, 12:30 AM
boing. i figure you want this to go south so heres dantes score card..0. your welcome..love scheszwa, shezswa.e
on Live from Boise Idaho...the cads! by Bachus 1 Dec 2002, 4:54 PM
you are ill man, get a life.n
on Iced by debased 2 Dec 2002, 12:54 AM
two problems: title and last sentence....titles weak, because it's not a tractor beam, and it should...and that's how you should end it...with....taking out "ever will"...cuz we all know it will. and put should.w
on Left, Cold by Tibbs 2 Dec 2002, 3:01 PM
sounds like an ethiopian homonid dig...lucy's footprints.8.??
on Embarrassed by Goose 2 Dec 2002, 3:07 PM
definition 84 in the thespians hand book..
on The Magician by Hooman 2 Dec 2002, 3:44 PM
science is a tool...i would argue faith is a tool, and science is a study of natural formulas used to define what's around us and effecting us on a levels at all times.y
on Superhuman - Nature - Hero by royalflesh 3 Dec 2002, 3:46 PM
3rd stanza should be fixed...it might be better.."what?....what are you thinking?" same with third sentence in third stanza...with "your" kiss is more personable than undying...might i have touched you? then differently is the only word, last sentence...the first two stanzas are incredible..really.8.
finely crafted...like a deer antler pipe in the hand of a drueling lazy boy chaired drunk uncle.
on some deleted poem 4 Dec 2002, 4:23 PM
damn skippy..i would make it willow wisps to the fog, and "in" the air, because on the air makes it feel too manmade like a silly glider...great fucking ballad..my hat is off to you..pun intended. 9.
on flight by soccer23 4 Dec 2002, 4:24 PM
passe. 6.
on The Limerick of Dave by worldsofwar 4 Dec 2002, 4:26 PM
to self absorb. wow did i say that? sure did. grand funks on...gotta go. 5.
on Girlz by liljsmith87 4 Dec 2002, 4:30 PM
can i ask you a sincere question? WHAT IN THE FUCK ARE YOU BABBLING ABOUT, AND WHAT EXACTLY CONVINCED YOU SPECIFICALLY speaking, THAT ANYONE SERIOUS ABOUT WRITING WOULD GIVE A FUCK?!
it was worth a shit while you were loved by another and oblivious because... but then in the last 4 or 5 sentences you bite your tail off by trying to criticize those with deep pockets...simply because anyone with half a brain understands the uselessness that accompanies the jealousy-guilt of that sentiment.6. i love the penny in the boys purse though.. nice twist..not lemonade mind you, but damn tasty still.
on Deep Inner Pain by razorgrin 5 Dec 2002, 9:03 PM
tomorrows headline.."man hijacks plane with saran wrap"!? he could use it as rope and a weapon..tie them up, then let them pick either smothering or bleeding to death..weird wild stuff. sorry about your arm and your cookies. 8.o
on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones 6 Dec 2002, 5:33 PM
amazing. like speaking life into a rib.
on i got a really big fan by Flattop 6 Dec 2002, 5:36 PM
funny..the end starts to toss and turn a bit, but funny, funny shit.
on some deleted poem 6 Dec 2002, 9:50 PM
you have the wit, of a harpies tit.
on Impervious by heart 7 Dec 2002, 2:18 PM
poets who write entire books on birds are in need of thorazine.
on InCumBent by slipping 9 Dec 2002, 4:55 PM
golden q-tip award. i believe this poem to be quite impressive in every sense and idea i can possibly fathom at this moment or any moment since. Cheers! 10!e