i love the atmosphere you create. I think you could extend this on further and weave quite a tale. Love it!

Hmmm...I really don't think this is the right time for the sentiment expressed in your poem.

A very somber piece. I think it fine except for maybe a couple spots. I don't think you want to use the word boulder in the fourth stanza and also the rhyme between edge and cage just doesn't work. But a pretty decent work nonetheless.

I can relate to the sentiment, but it seems like it was written in the style of a fifth grader who just got shot down by his crush. If you're a fifth grader--good job! If not.....uhh, better luck next time.

The universe just seems so big and uncaring, doesn't it? And life too short... I like the rhyming scheme--simple--but the flow could have been better in spots. 'Sides that, I like.

Juvenile and just kinda stupid. The repeat of "get your" makes it look like you just couldn't think of two other syllables worth of something to say and on a haiku, that's saying something.

I can't really relate to what is being put forth by this, so I don't really know what to say. Unusual overuse of question marks.

Eh, so so. Guess I just couldn't relate to it all that well and didn't really see the vision you were going for.

Ummm....I really had no idea where this was going. The pacing and feel of the poem seem ok, but what was the narrative of the poem trying to accomplish. I just don't see it.

Thanks both of you guys for actually taking interest in something I wrote. Most of the people on this site just rip people to shreds for no reason. I would also like to tell both of you that I enjoy your works very much. Thanks guys

i guess what i was trying to go for was that there are wonderful, beautiful things to see every day--any day. It's just a matter of seeing it and taking note.

interesting. i can definitely sense the emotion and the feelings in this poem, but the way it is written is a little odd (might be what you were going for) and i think that detracted a litte for me. maybe if you use the same topic but in a different format? I dunno, just my $0.02

interesting look at the "art" of music in today's digitality. Makes you wonder about everything that's gone digital today. Has it lost feeling because it's all 1's and 0's now. You've struck my curiosity.

a little weak on the poetic side (I know I suffer from the same thing). Seems like more of a quick narrative. I dunno, just my opinion.

wow, really dark. full of imagery and description. some points of it seemed to jump onto a new topic without real transition (or i didn't really see), but for the most part well done. dark, dreary, and dank.

interesting. i don't really know which way to take it but this poem seems somewhat morbid in tone, at least to me. That's not bad--I actually enjoy it here.

interesting poem. can't say i really understand what you're getting at, but it's definitely quite random. stream of consciousness seems like

I really love this poem. The sense of wondering and pondering is great. Definitely one of the better poems i've read in a while

thanks for commmenting horus8. i enjoy getting feedback, but could you please explain yours? I guess I just don't understand. Thanks.

Hehehehe...I can feel what you're saying.